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Queen of Hatred, Goop WG Fic - Part One Draft
🕑 Added 2022-07-24 23:22:24 +0000 UTC---
After 44 days in development, hopefully it will have been worth the weight.
This is the first part of the fic. About 12k words long. Contains goop, weight gain, corruption, and hints of hypnosis. The second part will be finished and polished shortly (like late tomorrow). Both will remain exclusive until the sequence is completed and colored in full.
Feedback will be appreciated as usualy.
Plan for the remainder of the month: Sketch compilation of poll winners, second monthly poll, colored secret sequence, LyLaD demonstration if possible.
Fic based on this sequence: https://www.patreon.com/posts/queen-of-hatred-67926708
Characters are from the game Lobotomy Corporation. If my introduction of the setting doesn't make enough sense, please let me know so I can build on it and improve it for readers who are coming in blind.
The Queen of Hatred: https://lobotomycorp.fandom.com/wiki/The_Queen_of_Hatred
Melting Love: https://lobotomycorp.fandom.com/wiki/Melting_Love
Comments
KAzul
This pic is so incredibly good. Can’t believe it is only part one of two.
667TRH
i'm already familiar with lobotomy corporation so i'm probably not the best at saying if you establish the setting well or not, but i think you did a good enough job here with it. perhaps mentioning the queen of hatreds other form so off-handedly would leave some confusion though for those unfamiliar? other than that, it's pretty good, well written, i didn't notice any major grammatical errors. it's well paced, and the fetish content feels fleshed out. thankful for some corruption wg fiction that's worth reading, i think lobotomy corporations setting is pretty solid for this type of thing. nice job, looking forward to the final version.
bicksmckgicks
Been looking forward to this, probably going to wait until tomorrow to read everything at once. I am coming in blind on the source, so I'll do my best to give some feedback.
Yeeterinoman
Looking forward to reading this. It’s nice to know I’m not the only one who spends a lot of time writing wg docs etc lol
