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B7—Chapter 5: How Not to Celebrate a Cleared List

🕑 Added 2025-08-19 19:04:48 +0000 UTC

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TravelingDreamer

It's regular, annoying glitter that gets everywhere. If you have ever had the misfortune to have it used in your home, you'll understand. It gets everywhere and is impossible to get rid of.

C Smith

So some mundane Chinese gliter that's apparently sticky, does such a thing actually exist?, actually bypasses a magical Clean spell...... this seems bad. I get your trying to bring in some wimesy in your story here but mundane sticky shit not being cleanable by a magic spell is outside verisimilitude. You should change it to she got the confetti from a magical world. These little things reject people from the magical world your creating. There have been a lot of little things like this in the story that could be better with small tweaks that wouldn't through ppl out of the magical world of your story. This is just my opinion, and meant as constructive criticism.

Silver Beard

Surprised he hasn't converted some of his Ability points to stats. At a minimum he should cross all the thresholds. With 215 in reserve- he could certainly afford it.


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