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Chapter 30

🕑 Added 2024-07-12 03:00:04 +0000 UTC

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Codewrds

Im assuming that calling out the mission impossible reffrence would be too easy for a prize

Josh

Definitely a believable mistake to start humming! Characters should make mistakes sometimes. It was him starting to explain it rather than immediately realizing the serious situation that seemed more off.

DevonHexx

Also, you're right about him trying to be who they need him to be. It's absolutely part of his character growth. He's gaining confidence and, with that confidence, comes more assertiveness and leadership on his part. His biggest challenge so far is coming up over the next few chapters.

DevonHexx

This might be a little self-insert on my part. Any time I've ever tried to be quiet or move stealthily, I've always started humming Mission Impossible, no matter what the situation was. Comes from being a child of the 80s, I think, and watching that show on television, and then getting older to the Tom Cruise movies. My point about the pop culture references was not that he will never make them, but that he doesn't drop them into conversations and expect people to get it. From a writing perspective, the references aren't a substitute for character development or substantive conversation. As the author, I'm not trying to drop nerd references at every opportunity to show you, the reader, how impressive my nerd bona fides are. The things he does like that are only things he does to himself, not things he says to other people. It was a bit of vocalized internal monologue and, once Allora gave him the side eye, he realized how silly he was being and how silly it would be to try and explain it. He didn't leave his past behind, it's still with him, but he doesn't throw it out all the time in attempts to sound witty. That's how I brain it, anyway. Also, apologies for not replying sooner. Somehow I missed the notification from this comment.

Josh

The "be ready" line really seems in-character for Mitchell. He's trying, very hard, to be who they need him to be. On the other hand, I thought better of Mitchell than thinking he would start humming, and then *explaining* his humming, while they were trying to sneak. Having a momentary slip and starting to hum, maybe, but *explaining* it? That made me think about both https://www.giantitp.com/comics/oots0090.html and https://www.patreon.com/posts/find-easter-egg-106471311 .


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