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Chapter 257: Blood, Rules, and Revenge

🕑 Added 2023-10-22 13:13:38 +0000 UTC

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nugitoBambino

jarring is maybe the wrong word. what i meant to describe was going from a story largely told from Mila's perspective (or at least /around/ her perspective) to one with a larger cast of side-plots or characters makes sense from a novel-writing perspective but the transitions between chapters felt sudden. Or, at least the Edi chapter felt out of place. going from vanar/ intro to the force -> edi -> vanar hundreds of years later was a weird transition. I was expecting maybe some chapters of edi coming to earth to learn about what the earth the a rank planet has access to or a re-intro to our core character perspectives (and finally finding out what the power of order actually does!). Not that you need to do either of these if you want to wait on those, but the flow between the chapters made it a bit less smooth.

Thirteen Life Legion

Could you elaborate a bit more on what is jarring?

nugitoBambino

honestly, i'm intrigued but not enthralled by the b-plot. I really want something to wet the whistle while we wait for our main characters to come in. I'd love to at least see a status from Vanar and what a normal high ranking c rank is if we're going to watch his plotline before figuring out our mc's new status. While i could see how the last ten chapters are solid openers from the perspective of a novel, it's been kind of jarring as a patreon member.


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