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Chapter 241: D Rank Race Advancement

🕑 Added 2023-08-13 14:10:07 +0000 UTC

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nugitoBambino

1) I think leaving out Diana for so long is the wrong move. Imo, a huge strength of this story is in our core characters: Mila (obviously), Aalam, Isaiah, and Diana. Removing Diana for what I estimate will be over a hundred chapters would be suboptimal for enjoyment. I'm still on the fence with the killing of the fetus with a curse, but I see what you were doing and do completely agree (at a minimum) with Diana being effectively killed that way. It really drives home how small our protagonists are (despite their per-rank domination) and how fucked they can be for any reason by the more powerful. However, I think waiting till C rank (and probably late C rank) is overkill as the point has already been made effectively and rank progression is fairly slow. Instead I offer this alternative that remains in line with everything as written: (i) mila's understanding of her uniqueness causes her to develop a new skill to inflict more traditional curses for damage and another to defend/fix damage caused by curses, it even ties into the new uniqueness with more skill slots as it could have been impossible to learn before and is in line with her diabolic/angelic theme (ii) this allows them to use fewer resources than anticipated to fix and revive Diana (iii) they still need to crush the D rank tournament to get the materials to fix this (iv) Aalam has something happen with a skill and/or uniqueness (maybe related to developing uniquenesses for others) that requires them to still do equally well or better in the C rank tournament to keep the plot on track.

nugitoBambino

Right, so I'm on vacation and I just finished a full re-read. The re-read continues to confirm I'm a huge fan, this system (meaning magic system in general, not just as a lit-rpg) really is the most comprehensive and well-thought-out I've encountered and the world-building is fantastic. Altogether, hugely enjoyable. That said I have two recommendations, one for future plot and one for general editing. Feel free to ignore them as I think they're pretty minor but I thought as an author you'd appreciate the feedback.

Thirteen Life Legion

I won't say much because we might be in spoiler territory, but think about Diana and her and Aalam's half siblings and realize their mother's race is certainly way more powerful than Aalam's.

nugitoBambino

with all of these modifiers, if aalam and mila had a kid what would the kids race end up being in the best case scenario? my understanding is you can't go above legendary grade when born, but if the soul lord class can't go below fabled what would win out, an even more degraded soul lord or the incubus/sucubus previous line? and would the kid keep the full set of kickass modifiers?

Thirteen Life Legion

Sorry. Quite busy today, so only one chapter. Also, the end of the next chapter isn't where I want to leave you for a week. I want to leave you at the end of the chapter after that. So, two chapters next week, ending with one of the biggest developments of the entire story.

nugitoBambino

i don't mind getting the full low-down on race evo over a full chapter - but I'm hoping we get the racial advancement chapters as well today!

chilly_pench10

I did enjoy this chapter but i would rather if the race evolution took less of the chapter, still ty


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