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Next Comic Idea (Helluva Boss)
🕑 Added 2022-11-02 21:40:46 +0000 UTCI've scripted the next comic idea but I feel like it could use some re-working. Maybe something funnier should be said or the characters should be doing something more?
What do you think?
"PG 1
Panel 1: Octavia, in her room, is sitting on her bed. She looks up when a voice calls out to her.
LOONA (off-panel): Alright, how do I look?
P2: Loona steps out, wearing clothes similar to Octavia's.
OCTAVIA: Whoa, you look wicked!
LOONA: I hope I'm not stretching out your jacket.
P3: Octavia looks her over, squeezing her shoulders in support.
OCTAVIA: Hush now! You look phenomenal!
LOONA: Heh, alright... thanks.
P4: Loona gestures to the closet. Octavia looks a little nervous.
LOONA: Alright, now you try on my stuff.
OCTAVIA: Ah... right... sure...
PG 2
P1: Loona checks herself out in the mirror as Octavia gets dressed.
LOONA: Hey, you done changing yet?
OCTAVIA: Y-yeah...
LOONA: Well, let's take a look.
P2: Octavia steps out in Loona's clothes. She looks very uncomfortable.
LOONA: Whoa, look at this sexy mama. How do you like it?
OCTAVIA: I... I...
P3: Octavia tries to cover her exposed skin with her hands.
OCTAVIA: I feel so exposed! It's so revealing! How can you walk around in this?
P4: Octavia grabs at Loona, who has a concerned expression.
OCTAVIA: It's not because you can't afford any more fabric, is it? Give me the number of your seamstress! I can buy you sleeves! As many sleeves as you want!
LOONA: Damn, girl, and I thought I was sheltered..."
Comments
Ronin Davis
It's cute.
Sathem
Maybe you could try making a version where when loona call octavia a "sexy mama" she imagine her mom in those clothes and then the rest role out like you planned... i dont know if this helps
