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🕑 Added 2025-06-16 20:00:08 +0000 UTCHello All, I just wanted to alert/point out a few things that I have been feeling and what I've seen commented on recent chapters. This is not a hate post or a shit post, I value the feedback and this is not me coming at you for voicing an opinion.
Mostly because I feel it is warranted.
I don't know when it started, but I've felt like the chapters after the Orc finale of the last arc have been... muddled and chaotic. Too down in the weeds without a lot of substance and then rushed and chaotic afterward trying to make up for it. I know of a few reasons for that but I will get into that later.
Right now, I spent the weekend trying to come up with a solution for how to go forward. I could just right the ship now and try to corral the story back on line, but I feel that will do more harm than good. Another option is to go back and fix where I went wrong, but that presents a different set of issues.
At first, I was going to offer a poll. One option for going back and redoing those chapters while the other was to forge ahead, but I decided not to. One, I couldn't honestly offer a poll when I heavily favor one of the options. It felt wrong to give you guys a choice when I'd already made up 90% of my mind. Second, after thought, and heavily leaning for one side, it would be difficult to shift gears in my head if the other option was chosen.
That being said, I should touch on why this happened, or at least why I think it happened.
Originally, when I first planned out the arc following the System Test, there was going to be a sizeable time skip. Not huge or anything, but enough for things to settle and grow from that point. But as the time to pull the trigger grew near, I just kept adding things and describing other scenes that ballooned the word count. I got too stuck in the weeds, I feel, trying to describe too many things that didn't necessarily need it. Not that I dislike what I've written, just that it could have been done better, and honestly, shorter.
Afterward, I rushed the time skip and it didn't come off well. Making two wrongs and making them doubly worse.
This is coming to a head now because I feel like I'm repeating the same mistakes and the pendulum will just swing in the other direction.
Now that that's out there, there are a few things I have to sadly announce.
I will be going back and redoing the chapters following what is currently published on RR. Some of the chapters will be kept, but I'm not sure in what fashion or what that will look like. I know this is abrupt and this solution has issues, it's just what I feel will do the end product best, and that's what matters to me.
Right now, as I think ahead, I'm hoping to take the week and do that. (6/16-6/20).
Where the issues come in are how to start reposting them. There will be times when information in a chapter you guys have already read reappears, or in some cases, whole chapters. There's just no way around that.
I'm still brainstorming how I'm going to go about it and any ideas you guys have are welcome in this regard. Or if anything else you feel I should know comes to mind. I know this isn't exactly what you guys want to hear, but I also don't want to continue writing what I have been. A re-write is never fun, but I feel it is the right choice.
For Clarity, there will be no chapter today, and likely won't be for the next few days. I will read what you guys say about how to move forward and come up with the best plan I can think of, but that won't happen today or tomorrow.
Thank you guys for the support and I apologize with the lack of chapters for the coming days.
Comments
John
Love the story definetly do what you feel is best so that you feel good about the story i think just reposting all the full rewritten chapters would be great
Skyus B
Hey Im agree with your chose and personally didn't like this time skip (BTW you skip 5 years or less didn't understand) after the time skip you keep talking about it during few chapter on the Chris pov with some flash back that he didn't want to talk and that is just frustrating, no fun. You maybe could do some little skip with resume like the family and Co do a meeting to talk about what happen this year's and what the objectif for next year's, then little small talk with some teaser maybe and again another years, new meeting but Chang the pov, maybe change the city pov. It could maybe be less rude than *break* x years pass Anna become adult but you need 15 chapter to know what she got, and for finish why the fuck Anna and other child star G rank on a planet D RANK , Anna literally live and grow with soooo much mana her body come from little child to grow as adult body BUT mana isn't doing nothing? her body is nerf to G rank until she get systeme¿¿ she live more time on a mana planet than a planet without mana, and you say G rank is when you don't even know what the mana sense is. Planet without any mana source make G rank people. Anna live 7 years with mana, ALOT OF MANA her family use so much on her, her body was expose to a d rank planet during 5 years and she still G rank, no natural evolution because of mana. There is a firewall of mana, that keep pushing away mana to avoid any natural Evo?? Ps:love your story and love your courage of coming back and change everything gg
Michael Flattery
Just chiming in to say you are doing a really good job and I absolutely trust your judgement on a rewrite! Pacing is HARD to the point that the most successful fantasy book series in history virtually all have sections their fans call "the slog" and those people aren't writing 750k+ words over the course of a year-ish (well, maybe Sanderson, but even then only in a really productive year). You've really managed to stand out (imo anyway) with a focus on character depth and how you respect their emotions in your writing. If you take that instinct as your True North and focus on having each chapter serve a narrative purpose I think you'll do great (and tbf that narrative purpose can be a chapter or two of "off time" now and then, stories I've read that are all "ON" all the time get old fast). I think your initial plan to have a time skip after the Orc event makes a lot of sense - maybe right after the rewards chapters and you could punctuate the time skip with Vulwin's caravan POV and shop founding POV? Maybe you skip to Chris discovering he doesn't have an Epic Profession option and write about Lakeshore (maybe intentionally indistinct or off-kilter or from others' POVs to reflect Chris not being in his right mind after the trauma of the Obelisk)? Maybe you jump straight to an evolved Chris rushing back for Anna's birthday. Whatever your gut tells you! Your building blocks are still solid and if some trimming will help you in your foundation and execution then go for it! It's your story I'm just the lucky such and such that gets to enjoy reading it!
ManguKing
I congratulate you for listening to your readers and your gut. There has to be a balance and it takes a very humble and wise person to keep said balance. Too much in favor of the readers and the author never advances his or her story, too much in favor of narcissism and the story risks dying. Glad that you reached equilibrium before it was too late. Now... I saw a great timeline designed by a fellow reader on either the previous chapter or the one before that. I suggest adding a lol to that. How you just did one chapter of side characters, why not do a mini arc of a demon or of the lightning lord. 5 to 6 chapters of side characters and then we return to the story with a time skip and a recap that's not an exposition nor a tease like how you've been teasing the whole massacre. How you come up with that? Its beyond me. I understand christ avoiding talking about such traumatic event, but that's why you have countless other characters who should gossip. Show us said gossip. Perhaps a merchant in the middle of building a caravan and asking questions about a potential route heard about what happened....
