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The Fall - Chapter 42
🕑 Added 2020-01-16 17:17:22 +0000 UTCDo you know about sunk cost fallacy? It's when you have invested too much in one thing and believe it will be a waste pulling out before seeing the profit.
Basically, it's what happened with this chapter of The Fall. After spending dozens of hours writing and rewriting this MOFO I was trapped in the aforementioned fallacy. For months now I've been trying to make something I could be happy with out of it, when I should have cut my losses and moved on.
Instead I clung to it and the lack of result took me to the dead end known as "writer block."
Fuck that. A man must learn to admit when he's defeated and that's what I'm doing now. I'm publishing the 12th and last version of chapter 42 as it is and move on with the story.
About this chapter (Spoliers ahoy): A buddy of mine and one of the driving forces behind The Fall has a huge thing for white girls (and bois, really) being Blacked. I'm... not opposed to it in a twisted story of betrayal like this one and I wanted to build the foundation of a post-ending(s) spin-off focused on that specific fetish.
Alas I don't think I made justice to the fetish or to the story, which is why the events going on in it will be largely compartmentalized until said spin-off
Comments
jmspikey
Wasn't Gray created to be the vessel for Artoia's spirit if I remember correctly so that she could be reborn with a physical body. You could also pull of a Rin situation with 2 Artoria's running around one spirit and one physical although would be a shitty situation for Gray hell thats already a problem for canon Gray since her apperance and personality are slowly getting overwritten by her.
IgnisHeart
The issue is that Gray was a descendent of Artoria when she was alive. As a spiritual vessel (servant) she is not capable of getting pregnant. Granted, it’s fanfiction, good fanfiction, but fanfiction none the less. So I suppose Icha could pull some magecraft to make it work.
TheSinful
Oh I know Icha wasn't. Just sharing why my friend hates it. I personally don't hate it so much as it simply doesn't appeal to me. Like foot fetish
IgnisHeart
I get where he’s coming from and I even agree with him on the points he made. But I don’t think that what Icha is going for is a racist portrayal. I think it more along the lines of Sabers now obsession as a size queen. But that’s just my opinion.
TheSinful
Honestly, I never got raceplay. Though the person I know who hates "Blacked" the most is actually a black dude who fits the blacked porn stereotype hard (6'8" and fucking ripped). First, it's got a lotta roots in thug culture which he hates. Second, he finds the whole "taboo" of fucking a black guy to be racist as fuck. Third, he takes fidelity very seriously and is both irritated by women offering to cheat on their SOs with him and wanting him to cheat on his GF with them. As he put it, "If a girl is willing to cheat on her boyfriend/husband with you, they're willing to cheat on you with someone else."
jmspikey
Now that i think about it if you really want to go all out with this you could spin this into its own ending where they do successfully break Saber into their own BBC slut.
jmspikey
Solid chapter would have been nice of Saber got triple penetration but still solid. Yeah certain kinks should probably be relegated to bonus content especially if they would permanently break Rin or Saber like Saber being a size queen is workable but having her become addicted to BBC would add restrictions to the story. Side note Saber could get pregnant I mean Gray exist so it's not impossible.
IgnisHeart
Glad to see this chapter finally see the light of day. Overall I really liked it, especially how Saber wound up puts those guys through their paces. If I had one thing I would have like to see in the chapter though, it would have been Saber getting it up the ass again. But overall good work and I can't wait for the next chapter.
