RodVonBoche
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Disintegrity 72 remake !
🕑 Added 2020-10-19 01:09:48 +0000 UTCWell turns out it's not BIILS but Disintegrity. Anyway, this time there are some things remaining from the old page ! One, the texture overlay that's barely visible, two, most of the background in the last panel !
I don't have much to say about the changes, it's mostly just re-drawing but prettier. The expressions changed a little, I'm not too fond of panel 1's new expressions but I'm tired and it's better than it was anyway so fuck, it'll do. Panel 2's Zee is a fair bit more excited looking now.
The biggest changes in the end were the things that seemingly take the least time to change yet took me a while anyway. The words. Page 70 and 71 are Zee arguing with Larsen, asking for him to just accept his feelings just for once. In old 72, Larsen just shuts Zee up with a kiss but I don't feel like it would make Zee just get over it so now Larsen gives Zee some leeway vocally which I think defuses the argument better.
That's about it ! I think the next Disintegrity pages aftyer that will be very different from their original just cos this whole sequence seems a bit meandering and boring in the original. I'm not gonna add plot or much dialog but I wanna give them other poses.
Comments
Jarrod
Facial expressions in the first panel, I agree, are a little.... odd? But totally fine. LOVE panel 2 though. Humungous improvement. I also like Larsen's verbal concession too. It definitely makes him more endearing. Oh, and I appreciate the better nipples too ;)
Eldkatten
I think the new facial expressions are brilliant and a big improvement. And the added dialog, too.
Diego P
they are adorable
tegirvaru
ah, that does make it so much sweeter, just that little bit of give from larsen makes such a difference ^.^
