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Disintegrity 67 remade
🕑 Added 2020-10-02 01:15:48 +0000 UTCShould I even mention that this is fully remade. Should I ? Seems like it'll be true of absolutely every upcoming page now...
So, why the changes ?
Overall, the structure of the page is mostly the same, there's just an added panel in the middle along with some text that makes it look very different, otherwise it really just is the same but with added blank space to make it breathe a little better.
The first panel has been shrunked and cornered a little more cos... well, cos I was wondering if I should even put it in, then thought that yeah it should be there but I hadn't made the room for it. So it's just stuck in the corner !
Panel 2 has a different expression on both of them. Zee is just different cos the old one is a bit creepy and I wanted him to look a little more pushy. Larsen meanwhile is less normal, he's not just calmly listening to Zee anymore, instead I wanted to show that he's not taking anything well ever. So he's irate, cos of course. Zee don't care cos of course too.
It leads to panel 3 where I wanted to highlight THE PEEENIS cos I wanted to highlight that this is what it's all about. Zee is super happy that Larsen is letting him fuck him and sees it as a culmination of sort whereas Larsen just wants to downplay it all. That's why I added the dialogue too, so that the next pages where Larsen goes "nuh-huh, not love, just sex" feel a little better built up.
Really tho I just wanted to add a dick in there cos it's hotter with a reminder than Larsen is being invaded in the rump while all this dialogue and other panels are happening.
Last panel is still a sideview of their bodies atop one another but with some changes to the pose. Zee's butt has been upgraded ! I guess his head on the other hand is less cuddly with Larsen but it fits better with the next page.
Anyway, I wanted to post the HD for 58 as well but it needs rework... Erf. Tomorrow it'll be then.
Comments
Jarrod
fewer tears is always a good choice. Even though these are explicitly happy tears.
tegirvaru
this page is really well done, i like it. and larsens comments are funny, always rationalizing those feelings. he loves it too.
matt
yeah the rework really shows Zee more 'on top of things' - which reinforces their respective attitudes about what's happening and why, as you said. I think it's smart.
