RodVonBoche
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Disintegrity 108-109 remade + 100 hd
🕑 Added 2021-06-02 23:27:57 +0000 UTCFirst off, 100 HD. Apparently it was only one month since this was remadeOld & new : https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1rqvbs0AhHkXSvBJQgKu35UspVeCur6CM?usp=sharing
Just new : https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1axdXteUc7pbZZD6PljuDC7JINqTEkRoV?usp=sharing
As for the new pages, well, it's like the opposite of the usual. There used to be lots to see, now it's all zoomed in on page 108 ! Which I'm sure some will find to be a downgrade, that's how I usually consider it as well but those were pages simply meant to show that Zee and Larsen fornicoom for a while. They didn't need to be explicit. Which is why they aren't anymore.
108 is one of those where I'm pretty sure I was inspired by how other comics i had see did it : to show a fucking timelapse, just show different poses in a single page with hazy paneling ! There's nothing wrong with that, it works but eh, didn't feel like retrying that concept. There's been enough of that in the comic til now, Larsen and Zee engaging in varied positions will have to wait for some new material instead of being thrown in a single page.
109 was just kinda lame. It just looks dumb to me; There's barely anything to see, Larsen's position looks stiff and probably not something that'd make him scream, he's crying for some fucking reason, the "just one more time" text looks like ass, the bad kind of ass, the kind that's barely readable and I clearly didn't put much effort in back then. The background looked okay tho, for what it was.
So I just went for some simpler imagery. A silhouette of Zee and Larsen with some more plaps in the background and I'd say it looks cool enough. Nice rain transition. The point is for it to take space and waste the reader's time. No, really, it's there to make the comic slower, which in extenso makes the pacing feel slower.
I added some "dialog" down there just for the sake of re-introducing the characters a little less cold than it used to be, especially since we don't really see their expression on the page anymore, it compensates.
Well, that's that ! There's now less than 10 pages to remake I believe.
Comments
RodVonBoche
Thanks !
RodVonBoche
I know, it almost frustrates me that it's not fully drawn
Jarrod
I actually was ok with original 108. But remake is good. a line of splooging dicks and tails intertwining is always good content. And 109 went from ok to something different and interesting. the silhouettes definitely make your eye stop and try to see what's happening. thumbs up in my book.
Eldkatten
I think I skipped those two pages when reading the story, 108 because it overcharged me visually and I didn't feel it was worth the effort storywise to figure it out, 109 because there wasn't much interesting to see. Skipped so much that I first now realised that there is the fence outside the house in the lower half of the page. But what a change now! Page 108 I can "read" now visually, and as opposed to the old version I understand the "time lapse" aspect (plus I do like the splurt section in the lower quarter. Of the page, the lower quarter of the page.) And page 109: from "Ok, move on to the next page." to something worth spending some time with and actually look at it. The silhouette is great. I think these two pages have improved a lot. Well, they didn't improve on their own, but you did it, so: Great Work!
matt
that overlapping silhouette shot is pretty boss, boss.
