RodVonBoche
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Disintegrity 35 remakstered !
🕑 Added 2020-04-08 01:59:48 +0000 UTCOk. So. Here's the thing. i said I would do the pages in order from now on. But I hadn't noticed that page 30 wasn't done either. OOOOH well. Next time page 30.
So what changed and why, I don't hear you ask --since this is a pre-written text and I can't hear you through the internet since I have turned the microphone that's under your bed off. Well, not that much and everything. As usual. The background stayed the same, some sounds remained, otherwise it's all new but it's fundamentally the same page beside that.
Panel 1 is not worth talking about, panel 2 is zoomed out and the chocolate isn't immediately on his face so that we can see Zee's expression andit's slightly easier to parse what's going on, panel 3 is mostly the same except the shadows aren't anywhere near as dramatic I suppose which does give the scene a slightly different tone but I like the brightness better, finally panel 4 is also zoomed out.
The most immediately noticeable change is that I added a lot of blank space in between the panels. I think it's easier on the eye, makes the page less busy-looking and it makes the second panel's splashy shape stand out more
That's it !
Comments
RodVonBoche
Erf. I don't. I drew that "awkward" sign multiple time and I still think it looks bad on top of being super weird in terms of mood. Ironically, the awkwardness of that awkward sign makes it awkward in ways I don't think it should.
RodVonBoche
Don't worry : it's actually magic chocolate that leaves no mark ! Even the cup disappears in subsequent pages.
RodVonBoche
Yeah, that's one of those design elements that's best not being thought about. I'm not the one who made Zee's design originally, I bought him for someone else and adapted their artstyle to mine ( https://www.furaffinity.net/view/12576913/ )
Eldkatten
Oh, that first panel! Oh, those faces! Zee cute, Larsen genually annoyed 😃 I always felt so sorry for Zee, getting hot chocolate - sticky! - thrown into his face, and I hoped it wasn't boiling hot and would not cause harm to that face of him. And oh, that last panel! Oh, that cute face! Oh, those angry canines (only one visible, though)!
matt
I kinda miss the 'and that was awkward for everyone.' 🤷♀️
Jarrod
I like that Zee has his eyes open in some of these panels. Sometimes I wonder if that boy ever opens his eyes!
