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Disintegrity 92 remade !
🕑 Added 2019-12-11 03:01:03 +0000 UTC"remaster" eh
So. This one changed a bit... I believe it ties with page 60 when it comes to completely redoing it with almost nothing left of the old page in terms of composition and angle. There's certainly nothing left of the old page in pratical terms anyway, not a single line, not a single background. It's all fully new.
So why the changes ? Well it's one of those pages I never really liked, even back then. I thought it was stiff and didn't build up to the climax on the next page. So much of it was close-ups that didn't give a good impression of the scene which is something I've come to really dislike, as mentioned frequently.
This panel 1 for example was just boring. I kinda like the dynamic feel of it thanks to the shape of the panel with all its serrated holes but it's just a boring panel otherwise. Still, I think it was okay-ish in introducing the page so I kept something similar, just widened the angle and showed more of the legs and butt, which I hope also helps understand how Zee actually fuck Larsen. I'm not sure it's physically possible still but WHATEVER... It's not an important panel beyond that, it's just for pacing which is why Larsen's tail from panel 2 covers it so irreverently.
Panel 2 is on a superficial level similar to the old panel 2, just blown up to take most of the page because. It's really all there is to say about it, whatever else I'd add is redundant by just looking.
Old panel 3 is gone cos it's wholly unecessary. Larsen's expression did change tho, I thought it'd be better if Larsen looked less composed as he feels himself about to cum.
Old panel 4 was the one panel I like. Doesn't mean it's good tho, his face would look really awkward if you could see it in its entirety, the anatomy is fucked but it doesn't show too much. His expression was cute tho so I thought it was worth keeping, thus new panels 3 is here, being basically the same idea and angle as old panel 4.
Finally, last panel is basically the same. It's the one panel that survived. Not that anything was carried over from the old page, it's entirely remade as I said but by and large it's the exact same idea, placed at the exact same spot with just a slight change in the angle to keep it consistent with both the previous panel's character orientation and the following page's panels as well.
I think there's still one page in the comic that'll require a similar redo because I'm not happy with how it's structured, but that's for then, for now, I'm going to sleeeeep byyyye
Comments
RodVonBoche
Exactly.
RodVonBoche
Belly up is a fake chinese food compagny that is the front of the triad in the game GTA 3. So that's just an old stupid reference that nobody ever picked up on.
matt
I reeeeeally like the 3rd panel switch - like - capturing that moment where larsen's control slips and he moans zee's name, and zee's expression at realizing that's what happening, and what it means - definitely a moment that deserves to be a little more front-and-center, rather than relegated to a squashed side-panel. Some solid reorg on this page.
Eldkatten
Well, thanks again! Good work! In case I didn't say that before (I know I said it a dozen times already): I'm glad you lost those pearly tears, and often there are no tears at all. I know it's important for the story showing Larsen crying at some point or the other, but he often came across as a real crybaby or that he suffered from conjunctivitis. I actually never thought about it, and knowing the story and the previous pages let me see this the right way, but looking at the old panel 1 it rather looks like Larsen - on top - is doing Zee. With the wider view and the changed angle the actual picture is consistent now with what I know is going on. Good that you made the new panel 2 with the actual content of the old panel 2 the main panel. It's so powerful and passionate, and in retrospective it's a shame that it wasn't as prominent in the old page. And, oh yes, good that you lost the old panel 3 and changed Larsens facial expression! New panel 3 is great! The old panel 4 was too small and didn't show as much how happy Zee is. Actually I barely noticed it in the old page. And the new panel 4 shows in comparison with the old panel 5 - because it has the same content - how much and at the same time how subtle your style changed. I did like the old "Desintegrity" for the story, while not for all the pictures, but I like the new one more, as it comes all together now (pun not entirely unintended). So here it's me again and my obsession with details: what is that "Belly up" thing (I see it alternately as a paper bag or a box), and what was/is inside it?
