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Disintegrity 37 remade !
🕑 Added 2020-05-12 23:21:02 +0000 UTCIt's kinda sad when the thing that takes the longest about redoing the page is... the dialog. The thing that can just be typed out and doesn't require much effort when it comes to making it look good, which is the point of this remake anyway...
Well let's talk about the changes before I harp on how long it all took. First of all, this is another page where nothing remains of the old one. Nothing, not a line, not a background, not even any letter. It's100% new.
I changed the angle on panel 1 cos I just felt like it. No real reason. In a way I perhaps should have redone it the way it was so that the first panel of page 39 would be the same angle but with a less angry Larsen... It doesn't matter too much tho. And it goes better with panel 2 which doesn't show Zee's expression anymore.
Panel 3 sees Zee's expression changed quite a bit. He's less angry, more desperate, as is reflected by the dialog. He's less making genuine demands and more making pleas. In the old comic, both this scene and one at the very end are Zee pushing Larsen down aggressively to impose a point of view upon him which I thought was repetitive, so I modified this one to contrast with the latter one a little more. I think. Maybe I'm ot sure.
The last two panels are basically the same excet they're shaped weird. To give the impression of time passing, the confusion of Larsen while he deliberates until he takes a decision as to what to do. The "no signal" on the TV is still SUUUUPER SUBTLE symbolism that Larsen is not making himself clear.
Also he's blushing now so the nature of the decision is hinted at a little more. And around the panel some orange bubble are strewn, it's the color that'll replaces the white background of the page when things start getting steamy.
So that's that. One of the hardest pages to redo to be honest.
Comments
RodVonBoche
Thanks !
RodVonBoche
Yep. Gonna play the stick of truth
RodVonBoche
Nah this ain't that sort of comic
Plush_Kat
I really like the change in tone. It is a real shift in perspective and it seems to not only feel more desperate, it also feels better.
Eldkatten
Wow, completely different tone and athmosphere. I agree with Jarrod in changing Zee from being scaryangry to sober and serious does a lot for this page. It's interesting that in the old version I thought Zee was pushing/holding Larsen down, which he actually isn't: Larsen could break free whenever he wants. Which first became clear to me with this new version. So the page went from aggressively arguing to coming to terms together. Again: great work!
Jarrod
Zee looking angry on this page did confuse me in the past. I think the changes to the expressions make a lot of sense. Desperation and pleading for honesty now come across more than anger and hostility as I think it used to.
matt
he wants to play games, obviously!
gurlow
AND WELCOME TO THE JAM and by jam i mean cocks going up buttholes...
