RodVonBoche
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Disintegrity 23 remade !
🕑 Added 2019-04-20 23:56:13 +0000 UTCTechnically, there's not too much changed in this page beside that it's almost entirely redrawn (except the background on the first three panels, the more you know), but obviously that makes it look quite a bit different still.
The big change is just the way the panels are laid out. It felt like the orignal page's layout was just a bit too clean, too normal given the context. Now it's gained in drama. To that end I also drew Larsen's face to be more visible. It seems more fitting than the dehumanizing shadows of yore.
Also yes I said yore.
Anyway, that about covers it. I guess I can link to the music the backgrounds words are lifted from :
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=q1XHc9Itqno
I'm not too sure I still think it suits the scene all that well but the words still fit at least.
Comments
RodVonBoche
That panel with Zee going "uuh" was just there for flow, to show that Larsen is grabbing him by the collar. It doesn't matter anywhere near as much as the other panels yet was a consequent size in the older page. So it got shrunk down and cut down. I removed the "uuh" as well cos it didn't seem necessary to have Zee be hazy and having a full silence before he speaks in the following page sounds more solemn.
matt
so you shifted panel 3 to be a quick shot of just Zee's ear and cheek - what's the story on edging out his face and "uuuuhh"? I do really like the lightning strike lighting relief on Larsen's face though, and the switch to having Zee peeking up at him with one eyeball.
