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Disintegrity 60 remade !
🕑 Added 2019-11-05 03:00:41 +0000 UTCSorry for the long wait, Halloween and Luigi's Mansion 3 got me busy while I was thoroughly demotivated. But there ! A page !
Now this one is entirely remade. Even the background.
The first two panel are somewhat close to the first two or the old 60, altho their order is inversed and vertical. I thought that after page 59's last panel, it'd flow better to have an immediate shot of Zee's head. I liked his expression in the older page but I figured it'd be better if he didn't look as collected, especially given that the panel follows Larsen squeezing tighter.
I haven't got much to say about the fingered butt panel on either page on the visual side, I guess the x-ray looks less gross ? Anyway, its placement is the more interesting part. In the older page, it placed first seems kind of awkward, as if it was that interesting to see that a moment needed to be made to show it off as soon as the page started. In the remake, it's just a transition with the more interesting panel, it's not there to really catch the eye.
Speaking of the more interesting panel, at this point the page has nothing to do with the older one. I thought that middle panel in the old 60 was lazy and uninteresting. It's just a really boring zoom, who cares ? It doesn't even look good... and it's made worse by the fact that the previous page was mostly cropped bodies as well. So a fullbody shot it is ! It's just sexier.
I could have fit the last panel from the original page onto the remake if I arranged the page differently but it didn't seem worth the effort. It wasn't a worthwhile panel to begin with so I figure I'd just skip it and no one will miss it. So now there's just words down the page, mostly unecessary but I think t'll flow better with the dialog in p 61 so I left it in.
So that's about it ! That's probably the page that changed the most in the remake so far.
Comments
matt
*squeeeeeeze...*
Eldkatten
Ah, found some details to talk about :-) I like how the background and details of the room are consistent. I finally managed to identify Zee's guitar (left of Larsen's left shoulder), the pumpkin lamp on the window sill and the heater (right of Zee's left arm). Recognizing those details makes one feel at home with those two :-D Oh, and the "X-ray" does look much better.
Eldkatten
I know that usually I come up with a lot of comments on details, but the remade page is such a big improvement that I am speechless :-) So awsome!
