RodVonBoche
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Disintegrity 17 + 124 remaster remake
🕑 Added 2019-10-19 01:10:09 +0000 UTCWell, just got these two pages. Maybe I'll have another one tomorrow. But that'll be then, so let's detail the changes in those two first :
17: Obviously it's not a very interesting pages to talk about since there's simply not much on it but there are a few things still worth mentionning. The first panel display pretty well the change in the way i draw profile views for furry characters. I feel like a small muzzle looks cuter than... whatever I was doing back then.
There's also that pure black bloc of blackness hiding Zee's eyes. It was for dramatic purposes but it just looks weird the way I did it. The softer black gradient is less aggressive.
Otherwise I added another black gradiant at the bottom of the page to make the transition with p.18 a bit less harsh. It's like a feade to black, except it doesn't fully fade to black, so it's not a fade to black, it's a fade to bleh. Also you can look at Zee's hair on that last panel on the old page and see how weird the linework is. It's goes from SUPER THICK to tiny to SUPER THICK again. Terrifyingly awful.
124 : There's even less to say ! I really liked Zee's face on the last panel, with his big eyes wide open but it was a bit weird that on the previous panels his eyes weren't opened at all (yet they were on the last panel of p.123). So now they're also open on the first panel. That's about it. The rest is just "it's better cos I draw better and that's it"
Anyway, maybe I'll actually draw the next YAGM tomorrow and not Disintegrity, I'm not sure. I'll see. Or the poll winning picture. I dunnow...
Comments
RodVonBoche
I've actually added some spots on that page since I posted it here (altho not many) since there was something that needed to be changed (nothing substancial tho, I just changed a word, the "daylight" written in the panel black lining of the second panel, below zee's head, turned into "superheaven" which is the new name of the band whose lyrics are quoted on that page).
RodVonBoche
It sure beats the random black tape he used to have there !
Eldkatten
Thank you so much for explaining everything so broadly each time, it helps a lot to see things I haven't noticed before. I agree with that the shadow hiding Zee's eyes in page 17 is much more natural now. I was allways fond of the dark spots the raindrops make on the fabric of Zee's sweater and especially the khaki pants, and I was amazed and happy about that finally an artist is aware of that effect and shows it. The spots are reduced quite a bit now, but still ok. Indeed not much to say about page 124, except that it looks more natural. Great work, as allways :-)
tegirvaru
nice changes, diesnt always have to be something going on, but those details show more mood/emotion which can sometimes be stronger than action
matt
i do really like the choice to actually show Zee's eyes there.
