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The Heat of Dorne Chapter 18

🕑 Added 2024-09-10 11:55:48 +0000 UTC

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TheWateringWizard

An absolutely incredible plan by Daemon and his lovers, so happy they got rid of the Mountain while also getting the High Septon killed. I hope Varys doesn’t have any kamikaze move ready, what with the Wildfire beneath the city. If not, his execution will be most pleasant. Happy for Arianne that after so long she was able to get her Daemon back. Love the story

Daeron Targaryen

Damn tease we need Jon with more Targaryen women

Voivode_Writer

Thank you. I fixed the errors.

Handyandy

Great chapter. Loved the heist movie style flashbacks that explained the plan back multiple chapters. I found some small things you might want to take a look at. Feel free to ignore or delete this comment. "Race remained clear in his violet eyes as he said, “Daemon is correct.”" Rage maybe? "“Fuck,” Gregor thought to himself as he stared down at the annoying little man before." Before him "“Time to go then,” Daemon muttered, grabbing his helmet." and "His squire had already helped him into his armor earlier, but when Arianne and the others came to speak, he’d sent him off with his helmet to wait for him." Contradiction here "His heavy platemail, dull gray and scared from battle," Scarred "As Glegane feinted towards his head" Clegane