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PftA Book 4 - Chapter 12 - Escalating Threats

🕑 Added 2024-11-01 01:31:12 +0000 UTC

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David Brims

I understand. Sometimes there is no way out but through, and you just have to write what comes to you. 😅 Thank you for the reply!

Procrastination

When I initially sat down to write this chapter, my plan was to describe the conversation between Emie and the Council. When I actually tried to get the words out... it was far more of a struggle than it should have been. Since I'd covered the Council in the interlude, I decided to shift my approach. Ultimately, Patreon is a draft zero kind of thing. Feedback from patrons helps me to adjust things, especially if several people agree that something should or should not be depicted a certain way. So, I appreciate this kind of feedback a lot. It doesn't mean I'll definitely change it, but I'll certainly consider it.

Kasper Lynderup Jensen

While I somewhat agree, it sounded like the meeting was just them informing her about what we already know, but I guess her ruminations on what was likely going to happen could have been made as a conversation with the council without the chapter being much longer and without repeating information. But I don't know if that actually would have made the chapter better or just different.

David Brims

Hmm. Good chapter, but I do feel that whether or not she cares about it, a meeting with the ruling body of her 'nation' is a defining moment for Emie, and should be directly included in the narrative. It's like documenting someone's life and skipping a meeting they had with their President. For me, it leaves a hole in the story


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