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PftA Book 2 - Chapter 41

🕑 Added 2024-01-11 23:09:55 +0000 UTC

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Braid

Thanks. #2 is an issue with Patreon's formatting when cutting and pasting from a word document. I try to add in an extra space when I notice it, but I guess I missed a few.

MehGyver

I'm not going to be weighing in on plot or arching themes. Instead, I want to point out two quick items to look into: 1.) It's "White House", not "Whitehouse" 2.) You might really want to go back through your previous chapters and correct the spacing after each time you've used italics or bold font, as there is no space between the custom-font word and the word immediately following it.

Mark Ridlewsky

And do not forget the promises Emie made to her old party. I have the feeling you're just going to let those promises die with the visit to the Realm Dungeon.


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