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Earthly Masters draft complete!

🕑 Added 2019-08-20 23:31:57 +0000 UTC

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Das Flute

This entire novel was really excellent. And I mean it, it was worthy to be called a true novel, not just a stretched-out piece of erotica fluff. You should truly feel accomplished with this. I especially liked the epilogue revealing little "twists" with Karin and Inga's happy endings not being quite as happy... Just two things that did come to mind: 1) I liked the preface with Emma and how she unwittingly helps set the stage for the revolution. It might be nice to bring it full circle and include her among the vignettes in the epilogue, even if only briefly. And I would have liked to see something of Bent and Kirstiane's new lives in the epilogue also. But just small things that came to mind!


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