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Chapter 81

🕑 Added 2024-07-03 17:10:36 +0000 UTC

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_mori

Julius’ ‘brilliant ideas’ seem more like bs to me. They have no substance. Before, he visualized is mama as tomato’s so he could more easily seperate it with a tomato sorting machine. Now, his aura is a vacuum cleaner? I get what you’re trying to communicate, but it also very much reads as though you’re getting the correct answers in an exam using the wrong formulae. Your use of analogies is a bad crutch in your writing. Just because you can liken his aura to small items spilled on a carpet doesn’t magically make the solution an imaginary vacuum cleaner. I recommend you put more thought into these things, or just don’t make the comparisons at all, for starters. TL;DR: how does an aura vacuum even work? It just does? The lack of depth in these ideas can become issue.

Derek Walker

Maybe. My theory is that the evolution is epic. Advancing it would strain his soul too much so it will advance soon after reaching tier 2.

Derek Walker

It was mentioned to have around 3 rare skills for tier 3, and currently he has 6, with 2+ skills. And as mentioned several skills are a strain for his body already. He loses absolutely nothing going to tier 2, and increase in strength will allow him to use his skills better and train them longer

Anonymonous

There's a conflict with the information that having higher rarity skills before you advance leading to better long term prospects and the casualness with which Julius is willing to advance. It's been bothering me. Why is he in such a hurry to advance anyway? And why is he so casual about it? He's just a couple of days into school, and just the exposure to new people and new ideas is leading to rapid advances in his skills. He must recognize this and that it'll eventually become harder as the low hanging fruit are picked first. Why not wait a little? It just seems so out of character for him to randomly advance like this. He's been thorough, meticulous and insightful through all his training. It reads to me like a deliberate plot point that's being rushed to fit some other story beat There might be some explanation I don't understand but if not that, it needs some extra work. You could either justify it better, or simply just slow things down by pushing time forward by a month or two of that works in your timeline. Edit: So, on some further thought, I think I have issues with the pacing. We've had new BFFs, magical NDAs, villains and villainy setup, new mentors, baby spirity thing. Why is everything crammed into the first week of school? The pace is fine in the number of chapters it took, but not in the amount of time it took in the story. This also leads to some of the interactions feeling forced. The whole geas thing didn't feel right to me because normal people don't work that way. Normal people wouldn't want to enter painful binding magical contracts with someone they've known for days. Normal people wouldn't be that pushy about learning the other person's intimate secrets either after they've known them for a couple of days, which is what led to the geas being required in the first place. All of that would have flowed so much better if a few weeks had gone by with the MC interacting with the other characters. Then the geas would feel like a logical next step, and not like a check mark on a plot point

Oliverthms

did he already try and power up his perception with his aura? Could be the thing the skill needs to evolve.

Sean

Julius is gonna be called 'The Dyson' later on.

Raymond Mouton

Thanks for the chapter. I can hardly wait, aura improvement and tier 2 coming up. Aaaaagggh… “Please, Sir. Could I have some more ?”


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