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Chapter 94: The Last Night

🕑 Added 2023-01-24 17:36:01 +0000 UTC

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Nilbog

I agree that Jack probably needs to sit down, take a breath and really think about what he's doing and saying because he's being more impulsive than he needs to be. I know he's discovered he's a bit of an adrenaline junkie but that doesn't mean he needs to make every decision in the heat of the moment. Aside from him I think others are alright the Sage is meant to be a mystery and so he is, Edgar is full of childlike wonder and he has remained so, Brock is a child who wants to impress his big bros and he behaves as such. I suppose Dorman seems a bit bare but it's not like he's opened up. There seem to be a lot of thoughts going on in his head. Vivi is alright. A bit less scheming than I thought but a character being a better person than I assumed is no failing. Alexander could possibly be explored more to explain why he sided with the scions against humanity.

IndyBart

Sometimes it feels like Jack’s anger and rage is very fake. He’s a PHD, almost. How has he never been involved in a lesson where he found the answer only to realize that his teacher knew before they even started? That’s every class from every teacher in every situation most of us have ever been. involved in. It would have been much more believable if a character had Jack just realized what had happened and turned to immortal ghost and bowed and said ‘thank you’ to show character growth. Instead you have the mentality of a teenager on too many steroids fighting like a button masher in Hulk Smash mode and the interactions are feeling a little forced. At this point I almost would rather he just get his ass kicked instead of winning and the rest of the story be about how he deals with the fallout vs. the impending plot armor win that feels about to drop. I have enjoyed the story this far and most of the characters, but I feel the author needs to take a breath and let the characters be more natural and less forced. Still plenty of time of story left for everyone to grow.

Nilbog

is he a dick or is Jack asking for more than was ever offered and looking gift horses in the mouth to such a degree that he only sticks around exclusively because of what he can get from Jack. Imagine going to your school teacher and expecting them to help not only you but you entire neighbourhood and then getting into a shouting match when they said that's beyond the scope of their responsibility.

E

Ugh just want to see them fight And the master low key is such a dick lol


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