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Chapter 1764

🕑 Added 2021-05-14 01:42:37 +0000 UTC

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Michael Marisa

How many times must I cry for Helen? 😭😭😭

ElectricintheForest

This chapter was thematically perfect, puddles.

Joshua Little

Thanks for the chapter.

SunderGoldmane

Both use the visage of obsession as the foundation of the narrative.

SunderGoldmane

Some feedback on the visage of obsession: I love the fatepiece. I find the concept of exponential sacrifice used as a force multiplier to chase a goal utterly fascinating. It has real world parallels for me. Truly, I love it. That being said, I’m not sure your audience can handle another use of it. I really like how you work through the different sacrifices and how it is unique to the situation but if you decide to use it again I think you will have to use it in even more broad strokes than you are in this current arc. I personally want to see it again but I don’t think narrative will thru e unless you ha r a strong B plot to run in the background next time. Love your work puddles, thanks for the story and Happy Birthday!

SunderGoldmane

It’s the first comment that he makes to every chapter, just type your corrections into the reply of that first comment made by puddles.

Kurt A

I know its probably intentional, but this arc feels very similar to the Nether Core creation arc

Raikazzen

I personally really like the image refinement. The multiple different layers and all that got me really interested.

Subliminary

“Something tried to trample him and then something else tried to melt him with acid. Monkeys had Then Shal had arrived...” Idk what happened there lol

Subliminary

Guessing tomorrow’s chapter actually concludes the arc? Honestly I can’t take any more image refinement chapters. Great writing and imagery but I feel as though I am stuck in the visage of obsession, a never ending cycle of verbose flowery language describing details of an image that isn’t even Randidly’s own image.

Subliminary

Preemptively typing this message that I expect a DRAMATIC conclusion to this looong drawn out image arc with these two chapters. My expectations are high senior

nethernight11

Thanks for the chapters

Corwin Amber

'father walked back over to him' him -> her 'So the desolation spread, when those three sparks within her satisfy her baser desires any longer, and completely extinguished the Lizakh' <- this sentence doesn't make sense. Please re-phrase.

Alexander Dupree

Use the corrections thread that's why he posts it. They're hard to find otherwise

Alexander Dupree

Thanks for the chapters

James Hebert

First paragraph: Monkeys had Then Shal had arrived and shown him how to rigorously encourage his acceptance of pain and violence. In his master’s mind, such things were simply a part of life. Not sure about the “Monkeys had” is supposed to flow.