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Chapter 1525

🕑 Added 2020-09-19 05:14:28 +0000 UTC

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PrimalShadow

You need to use a different word for one of the "surprise"s in " to his surprise, Randidly immediately grunted in surprise"

Konrad2

its effects should be so sudden if -> shouldn't

Konrad2

explodes grew larger -> explosions

Konrad2

to forces about your level -> above

David C

Lol at Vizzeret getting the Ghosthound demonstration that DiOrtho wanted

Joshua Little

Thanks for the chapter.

Chris

I really wanted to see what happened to the dog

EnigmaticOne

"At a symbol that was invisible to Vizzeret, the two blurred into motion." Instead of symbol, I think signal works better. Symbol feels awkward in this sentence to me.

Alexander Dupree

Wariness (cautious) -> weariness (tired). Randidly grunted in surprise (look at this sentence in the chapter I can't find it again but it looks like you didn't finish your edit on it.)

nethernight11

Thanks for the chapter

drag0nreb0rn

Yes!!!!

PuDDleS4263

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