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Chapter 1532

🕑 Added 2020-09-25 05:05:09 +0000 UTC

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Will, of the convictions forge.

Thanks for the eggs

Umut Numanoglu

It is mentioned that he is related to Rex family but I belive his skin color is different, he is also hairless I believe

Umut Numanoglu

Lady Iellaya’s didn’t even react. -> Lady Iellaya didn’t even react:

Grammarmelade

Thanks for the chapter! So this Neshamah Rex is related to his recruit Benjamin Rex, I guess. Was it mentioned, that he has blue skin?

EnigmaticOne

"she’s better than using than I am" - she's better at using it than I am

nethernight11

Thanks for the chapter

Corwin Amber

'room the soldiers' -> 'room for the soldiers'

Joshua Little

Thanks for the chapter.

Kevin Mendoza

The real residences. If your goal is to write to a audience, you want to give clear language, simple language often. Instead of “the real residences” which is incorrect based on context how about “The local populace/population” instead ?.

Hampus Steinvall

Not sure this applies to your world but in the beginning you say that they "moved all soldiers under the rank of commander out of the way". There is usually a pretty sharp divide between soldiers and officers and I think commander sounds like an officers rank rather than a soldiers rank. Perhaps write "any military personnel" or maybe "anyone under the rank of commander"