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Chapter 1529
🕑 Added 2020-09-22 04:36:20 +0000 UTCComments
Will, of the convictions forge.
Who was kallum again? Thanks for the eggs.
nethernight11
Thanks for the chapter
Idan tal
sounds like the creation of a black hole
David C
So he’s using extremely high gravity to crack the shell surrounding the ember of a dying world... it sounds almost like the formation of a star
David C
“Her bones resonated with the rumbling force that was rumbling through the air“ —> remove the first rumbling
Nate
can't wait to see the new and improved Chimera
Joshua Little
Thanks for the chapter.
Kevin Mendoza
Last sentence. Consider adding the word “brief” before “moment” to add tension and substance.
Kevin Mendoza
Every more worryingly =>Even more worrisome/disturbing Instead.
Kevin Mendoza
After it experiencing it. One too many “it’s” remove the it after “after”
Thundermike00
One down four more to realize their limits.
Alexander Dupree
Lol the reason why he learned to create that aura is to stop people from murdering him hahaha ah
Luke Scheffe
Thanks
PuDDleS4263
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