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Chapter 1509
🕑 Added 2020-09-03 04:55:26 +0000 UTCComments
Will, of the convictions forge.
Fucking savage transformation. I can see Rand looking like a monster full of rage covered in shadow that reveals his figure like straight out of a horror movie. Its like in the movie split and the man called the beast
SunderGoldmane
“His skin began to darken//Ed// and char”
SunderGoldmane
“...”Toward the entrance to the main entrance of the area...” feels like there is a redundancy in this sentence?
Joshua Little
Thanks for the chapter.
InsaneHyde
I think it works better dropping the s. "Ram horns"
Krazy Kanaka
"impatience to dominant his aura" - should say dominate
Krazy Kanaka
"He wondered for several if he" - needs a word to measure the time in between several and if, "several seconds" or "several long breaths" etc.
Krazy Kanaka
"gather all of the strongest individual" - should be individuals
Corwin Amber
'rams horns' I'm not sure, but should it be 'ram's horns' ? it currently looks wrong, but I'm just not sure if it is or not.
nethernight11
Thanks for the chapter
PuDDleS4263
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