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Alan and Louis on vacation // writing snippet + doodles
🕑 Added 2020-08-12 19:58:03 +0000 UTCSomething very different this time! I used to love writing in my native language in the past, and I was quite good at it for a 12 year old, but honestly there's no way I'm going to ever reach the level I had back then, let alone in another language π It was my first time trying to write anything coherent in English, I apologize if it's painful to read (hopefully at least a bit less painful than it was to write lmao). I was bored at the beach at the last day of my vacation so I wanted to try writing a short snippet to imagine their characters more. I wanted to focus on a general feel of their relationship and idea of going on vacation together since I have a few vacation themed drawings in mind for them. Either way it's just a big experiment haha. (Hugely inspired by @t0k0r010's amazing writing that sadly exceeds my current level of language comprehension but at least got me to try something on my own for once π)
That said, if anyone here is good at English and feels like correcting my mistakes, please hmu!! π₯Ί
Doodles are taken directly from the pictures I took that I wanted to play with. I hope I'll come up with something decent at home if I don't go insane haha
Comments
Excellent writing!
Ola
Thank you!!! TT
!!! Beautiful !!!
Ola
Aw really, I'm glad! ππ Especially since more often than not I'm just guessing haha. And yes! π Thank you! ππππ
The grammar and syntax are perfectly correct, which I think is really good since you aren't a native English speaker. Aw it looks like Louis is attracted to Alan cos it revitalises him. It's really cute^^
