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IM/DC Chapter 65

🕑 Added 2024-04-26 05:32:39 +0000 UTC

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Reader

Nice spacing on the paragraphs! It makes it easier to read it. GRAMMAR! (I did not want to be a grammar Nazi but look into independent and dependent clause comma rules. It helps the reading a lot. Also, it is easy to understand, while a practice of 2 or 3 hours gets you into the habit.) Google images have a few good examples of independent and dependent clause commas. I find this usually fixes 70% of grammar and makes it easier to read. For example, the sentence "once again my actions have people stun locked like my actions broke their brain and they don't know what to say" becomes, once again, my actions have people stun locked like my actions broke their brain, and they don't know what to say. I am not nitpicking every single grammar mistake. I also make grammar mistakes, but I genuinely believe that the independent and dependent clause comma rule is extremely essential. It helps break up wordy sentences and makes them much easier to read. Lastly, Do not let this impede your stylistic choice in writing!

Reader

Plot design: The early introduction of WW3 and the after math of merging marvel and DC is excellent. Cutting the over powered 💩 like time travel or coming back to life is nice. So keep the early introductions. (This review is coming out after reading it once. I will read it again and try to give more detailed feedback. )


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