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Changelog (116-121)
🕑 Added 2025-02-28 10:07:40 +0000 UTC116: Mostly just changed some wordings, cleaned things up, made it feel better. Some stress was taken off Pt 3 to make the Karin sequence a little more palatable without detracting from the potency of the scene.
117: I added like 400 words of flavor text and 200 words of cleanup, bringing the chapter to almost 4K. There's a little bit at the end changed to have Sasuke commenting that he doesn't like leaving it all up to Ino, and Sakura agrees. Otherwise uh, pretty much identical. Smoother, better written, same chapter.
118: Just some better description and cleanup.
119: Only notable part is I cleaned up the Karin part to be more emotionally fitting.
120: Ino VS the KSH is a lot cleaner, I really focused on the scene so it felt better and gave a better idea of their dynamic and what's going on here.
121: I added like 400 words of flavor and cleanup. A lot of the chapter's imagery was unclear, and some lines were written in such a passive tense they had no impact. Sasuke's standing in front of his burning hatred made real, and I missed the mark there. I think I did a better job now. That Ino took out one of the bribed teams is given in a quest prompt now.
