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64 - More Testing

🕑 Added 2023-07-04 16:00:07 +0000 UTC

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Eric W

Nice to see Sable actually working to get ahold of her new body/abilities. I always hate it when characters brake out untested powers or abilities they have had forever but never practiced or used and it somehow goes well for them.

Darastrix

Some feedback. Exploring powers solo chapters while they might be interesting to write are some of the lowest engagement chapters. Instead of them solo exploring their powers have them have a dialogue while learning, or them showing the fruits of their labor after dropping some foreshadowing that MC has some new skill and skip these parts. These chapters get really repepetitive when we have no major plot going on and we're just waiting for something anything to happen. Like we get it MC is powering up for the next step of more powerful characters that are gonna come in let's skip this and show us some progress instead of telling us. If ur struggling for plot, take a week or 2 off and do some outlining but please don't do these endless chapters of incremental improvements with no character development, it's sucking all the joy from this novel for me. Like these type of chapter is fine to do every once in a while, but not like this. Humans are social creatures and care about social interactions, they are ur main guiding light in a story. This is a rough comment with some rough feedback, I mean no offense to the author or any other reader that might enjoy this chapter.

Indeed! A clash of epic proportions, or a beatdown, showing how far she's come. We'll see soon!

JulesBeHere

I wonder how the troll will fare against her now!

JulesBeHere

It's a good thing Sable's getting a handle on her human body and understanding its benefits and limitations in practice.

Ooh, going for a rematch with the troll I see. Nice!


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