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The Nature of Predators - Why the Caged Bird Sings (1/11)

🕑 Added 2024-06-22 11:00:08 +0000 UTC

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lukas0797

This child definitely doesn't belong in a prison. She's not even capable of really making her own decisions, she just parrots what her mother has fed her. This child needs a family. A family that can give her a normal life. And she needs professional help. Oh my God, this is so sad I'm crying right now.

Space Paladin

Yep, it’s a nod to DOAM!

Invariance

Are the mangoes a Death of a Monster reference, or was that based on something you said earlier? I know you said DoaM was one of your favorite fanfics.

Mr Mopp

Oh my gosh, I just did the math; the poor kid has been in that cell for 10 months.

Alekss Žukovskis

wonderful. this hurts, as only good stories do.

Daru Arura

Oh, absolutely. I didn't know I was setting myself up for a chest punch by opening the chapter.

Daru Arura

Oh no... I'm gonna cry again in this one. I just know it.

Space Paladin

Just being cheeky!

Kilo Rat

Was there really a "Kalsim Youth", or was Andrew just being cheeky?

extraintelligence

I know it's a common trend for the first human an alien meaningfully interacts with to also become their best friend, surrogate parent, lover, etc, but I'd really appreciate it if we could get something where that person says "I'm out of my depth" and hands the alien off to someone else. Like, it was really refreshing when the soldier who saved Talpin's life wound up not being too relevant past that point. I'd like to believe that at least some people have the self-awareness to get a professional involved, and that the aliens don't just cling to the first human that treats them with common decency. Of course, in this context, it would absolutely make sense that Cala would cling to Andy. She's a child seeking validation after years of conditional love, so of course she'd immediately attach herself to the first person who gives her some real compassion. With that, while I can't speak for everyone else here, I know that I'd be very happy if Andy has the presence of mind to realize that being a soldier or prison guard who's grieving the loss of his brother, he has neither the skills nor state of mind to help an abused child deal with her trauma, and instead calls on a child psychologist to help her instead. It wouldn't even remove him from the story, as the psychologist could easily turn around and say "she's in too fragile a state of mind to handle any kind of abandonment, and you've made an impression on her, so you really need to stick around until she's sorted out."

Pineapplepilot

SPACE PALADIN!!!! MAKE THIS SAD MAN ADOPT A TRAUMATIZED BIRD CHILD, AND MY LIFE IS YOURS!!!!!

Gumcel

Her mom isn’t even on screen and she’s already one of the worst characters lol. “Papa helped me create an application, looking so proud of me. That was all I ever wanted” “The human was encouraging a lot of what Mama called immature behavior; I should be ashamed of doing a stupid activity like this.” “the way Captain Karlem kept yelling at me when I didn’t shoot the right weapons fast enough.” There are so many lines like this that it starts to feel a bit superfluous in my opinion. Regardless, it may not be krev, but the baby bird in the bird cage story is a nice idea.

EliasArt2Life

Knowing @Space Paladin ’s style, probably shortly after Andrew brings up just how ignorant and young the child soldiers are to the UN. The idea that these soldiers are too young to even comprehend what they’re doing is probably beyond the UN’s worst fears at this point. I know that I thought that the child soldiers would AT LEAST be at an age where they’re psychologically capable of understanding what they’re doing and the implications of what will happen if they succeed/fail. Anything less comes off as slavery/exploitation, rather than soldiers.

TheBlack2007

Because locking her up with others would just reinforce her programming. I downright refuse to believe the UN would throw a literal child into solitary and keep her there for months. There must be something else to it than that.

Quiidek

Aw damn you done made me cry a little. :( I want more!

Tyler Ellis

Wonder why she gets a pen alone. This standard for the survivors? Figured they’d all be holed up together. Either way I’m digging this new series!

Guardian

Oh sure, vote for Child Soldier, Guardian! That sounds like it'll be a kick-ass, fascinating read! *reads Chapter 1* Well, I'm not wrong..... Note to self: will need tissues. Lots of them. Yes. All the tissues.

Charles Hall

Oh, this is going to be awful in the sad way isn't?

Space Paladin

😢

Space Paladin

I’m glad I could bring you around to the idea! 😅

Criss

What incident? I forgot, sorry

Space Paladin

The title was a suggestion from a poem’s line by a good friend!

PhycoKrusk

Solitaire is more pattern-based than math-based. You didn't really need to know what the relative value of the cards are to play; you just need to know the correct pattern for the stack.

Yonael Blackwood

Is Cala actually a child? My brother in Christ, that's literally the crux of the premise.

PhycoKrusk

That actually is going to work in her favor, because the argument can be made that she _didn't_ understand what was happening and that she was _not_ in control of her actions. And honestly, most Humans will recognize that she didn't really decide to attack them; she decided that she wanted to make her parents proud, she was told that this is the way to make them proud, and she didn't really grasp what that meant.

Some Lvm

I still don't understand why so many people voted for this... I know it is only one chapter, and a somewhat short one, but so far it looks kind of redundant: * Fed alien thinks humans evil. * Some human treats alien humanly. * Alien understands humans are people. The setting isn't even innovative... That said, realistically, Andrew is about to get a cell all of his own, isn't he... WTF kind of dereliction of duty is this??? Entering a prisoner's cell without authorization or backup, bringing in contraband, and playing games instead of guarding??? Seriously - this is the kind of thing you get jailed for, than dishonorably discharged. And lets be fair here - is Cala actually a child? Even if she is 8 earth rotations old, this means nothing since she isn't human. We learned from Nova's children that Venlil mature faster than humans, so what about Krakotle? It would be a lot more interesting if this story dove in to why Krakotle sent someone so young in to battle? What is the structure of their society, and when does one become an adult by their standards? But from this initial setup, it does not feel like we will be getting those answers... This does give me an idea for a more interesting story, though it would not be SP's style: About a group of guards that did decide to find out what Krakotle tastes like, and conspired to put one on a rotisserie.

EliasArt2Life

Well… this was disturbing. This was wrong on just so many levels. A) This line of work definitely falls into my, “children should not be allowed to make this decision outside of life or death/other imperative situations, even if they give consent, because they can’t comprehend the implications and consequences of it and there’s not way to be sure they aren’t giving consent solely due to parental or societal pressures” category. I’m even more concerned considering that she’s 8. Even given the shorter age to maturity that I assume the Karkotl have, that’s only ~10 in human years. B) Cala is apparently too young to even fully grasp the concept of death, as her go to descriptions for it are that people “didn’t wake up” and she talks about Captain Karlem like he could still yell at her if she wasn’t locked up, despite the fact that he’s clearly dead based on her description. Other things she says are similar. She only comprehends death as an abstract; an evil thing that takes people away. She doesn’t seem to truly grasp it. C) The clear amount of approval that Cala wants… and for a kid like that to be pressured and hard pressed into the Extermination Fleet. Ugh! What must her home life have been like that she feels such a deficiency of support and approval others… D) So apparently they understand the negative impacts that kids seeing murdered bodies can have on them, but not the impact of making them into child soldiers? Also, they apparently didn’t care THAT much for her impressionable young mind being exposed to potential gore and death and destruction, since they were proud and helped her get into the Extermination Fleet. Even from orbit, she was bound to be exposed to it to some unfair degree. E) The way captain Karlem treated Cala. It’s like they don’t even see her as a kid. As if a kid soldier wasn’t bad enough, they’re abusive because she’s messing things up because she’s a kid! F) I feel like Cala had an abusive home growing up. I don’t mean physically; I mean psychologically. This pressure, forcing her to become an Exterminator, and pushing her towards it at such an early age, and the lack of care for her mental state. The worst part is how she was discouraged from playing. They were pushing her towards adult maturity LONG before she was ready. That is DEFINITELY a form of psychological abuse. At the very least psychological neglect, which is a form of abuse. G) She doesn’t even seem to fully understand what the cattle pens are like. Every other alien we’ve imprisoned mentioned how they felt their cell was much larger and accommodating than they expected. All Cala remarks on is that it’s colder than she thought it would be. She has never had the picture in her head of a tiny pen that’s hardly enough for 1, holding 2 dozen. H) the only good thing about Carla’s mental state is that she can’t fully grasp what her parents are likely going through. I) She’s so scared when she thinks that she messed up the shuffling, and is trying so hard to prove she’s not stupid! It’s like her entire life, any kindness she experienced was conditional based on her success and wit. J) Can we just give her a warm blanket and a hug? Especially the hug. She needs a hug.

Shajenko

According to the last chapter of NOP1, all child soldiers got blanket pardons. Of course that was some 13 years after this chapter, so who knows how long Cala will be in her cell before that happens?

EliasArt2Life

I figure that I want to avoid spoiling anything, so my comment is in the reply to this one.

Thrownawaz

Oh thank goodness. I forgot about the poll and when I saw the title I thought SP'd gone nature of pets!

Rick

I have to admit this was my least favorite option out of the three but I'm rather interested where this goes now.

Byron Ritchie

1. Considering the baby stroller incident mentioned in one of the other side stories I wouldn’t be surprised if the krakotl officers made their child soldiers do fire based games with human children 2. Is that a motherflipping spaceballs reference!? 3. Overall, sp15 somehow made me hate the feds even more Overall 10/10 would eat kfc again while crying again Also I can’t wait for Andrew to become carnivore-dad for cala

Sci-fi reader

You who else where children soldiers? Padawan / Jedi. Looking forward to the rest of the story.

Dookus Maximus

Well isn't this a bunch of sunshine and rainbows?

Michael Halpern

which means any relatives she has that didn't die in the battle for Earth were probably glassed or eaten by the Arxur.

Michael Halpern

Solitare being a math based game made me realize it hasn't been established what the base numbering systems the various races use are. most numbering systems in human history are base 10 (Bablelonians used base 60) because of number of digits. i would assume a similar trend would apply to the other races, with quadrupeds probably using base 4 unless they can individually articulate their forepaws easily. Maziacs are a bit different, because their trunks are their primary manipulators, and they have really good memory though they could go off of their teeth.

un_pogaz

Eight years old, she's really far too young to be where she is. She's drink a lot of Kool-Aid, but the advantage of her young age is that she's still very malleable: the indoctrination hasn't sunk in and it'll be easy to get her out of this propaganda. But someone would have to be dedicated to talking to her on a regular basis for that to happen. Besides, her curiosity and childlike innocence are a joy to behold. And now that I think about it, I'm really curious to see how kids like Cala will evolve in 10-20 years' time. Their political opinions, their attitudes towards the Federation and their time as Exterminator Juniors. Survivors of sects are often radical and particularly combative against them.

Mark Baculna

Wow child soldiers

PassengerNo

This is dated as July 2137. The Battle for Earth happened in October 2136. The Battle of Aafa happened in March 2137. And no one has come to collect Cala.

Michael Halpern

She's going to have scars for a long time, as she matures. no child deserves a lifetime of regret for being forced into something that they lacked the maturity to understand. the worst part is, being forced to do it may have saved her life.

Mari

Jesus that poor baby.

Ciberj1

God dammit why does it hurt so much to read this!!!

Serjio Dragonis

The only shinning hope is that she is so young, children are a lot more flexible than adults so there's a way better chance to tackle indoctrination

Johnonymous

:(

Heroman3003

Oh, this is painful. Very very painful. This is a child war criminal... And one that genuinely is too young to understand. Oh god, she is pure and innocent, she doesn't deserve any of this... Oh baby girl Cala.

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