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The Nature of Predators - Star Crossed (6/13)

🕑 Added 2024-03-30 11:00:06 +0000 UTC

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pogman

Oh damn I didn't realize the power disparity. On the bright side, Kelvanis is def into her and had little reason do believe he can sway the UN that way as we can see by the way he acted in the previous chapters, he also wouldn't speak out against her

Yannis Morris

Huh? I’m sorry, I’m not understanding your comment

Dcluigimario

That makes no damn sense! Why bother at all allowing them to come up to the space station for an attempt to get off of AAFA Kolshian that goes up there anyways? As if every single human on earth is an innocent angel who would never commit a crime in their life.

Seamus

Jesus Christ girl ! day one as a case worker and you screwed the alien refugee you’re in charge of 😬 yeah with the massive power imbalance between you two, you’re playing around with SA charges. What if Kelvan didn’t want to….but thought his asylum claim may be denied if he didn’t. Regardless of his feelings. At best she should be fired and shipped back to earth, at worse she’s doing jail time.

Matěj Habarta

If I close my eyes to the glaring safety breach that just happened with Kelvan, in what world is it ok to fall in love with a refugee you are supposed to process. Like wow immagine that emigration oficer would take a refugee to their room. I also really like the portrail of racism as it is in real life. I know from experience that people don´t just wake up racist one day. For example my uncle (truck driver) was arrested along with a friend for 7 days becose some arabs cut open their trucks and tried to smuggle themselves to britain. He didn´t know english, neather did his friend so one week of jail time for him, no punishment for the people that brugled his truck. He also had multiple experiences with rocks, trees and burning tires thrown at him to stop so they would pile up in the back of his truck. Rcists are made by their personal experiences.

Quenten

Y'know, the title of this side story is really concerning me. I think I know what this "incident" might be and that it might also help bridge the gap between Humans and Kolshian. If SP sticks to his reference material.

TheBlack2007

Is the "Predator Disease" Stigma still a thing on Aafa? If so, Chloe may have accidentally handed Kelvan a ticket off-world.

TheBlack2007

The UN doesn't need any inspiration from the Federation to mistreat refugees. It will manage to find plenty of that in its own history. Also, Chloe pretty much committed the cardinal sin of refugee work.

Elliott

100% deserved it the first time. Deserves it a second time. Then however many times it takes to kill him.

Elliott

Consortium > Sapient Coalition

Michael Halpern

I see a complaint against the supervisor actually.

Bungus Grungus

Maybe they don't have any other avenues

Mike Barth

Ya boy Kelvan got himself some human strange, good for him. Why do I see a poor decision like Chloe trying to flee onto Aafa to try to be with Kelvan and causing a huge incident that makes interplanetary news.

Mike Barth

Sounds like several have.

Willy

Remember the SC is a collective the Humans could face some backlash if seen helping a race that basically made the galaxy a living hell. But I still agree that they can do better

DrewTheHobo

I’m surprised all their interactions aren’t recorded and observed, if even for security reasons. Plus having records of what the Kolshians were talking about, how they acted during the interview etc.

Floating Kelp

U.N. really just a new coat of paint for the Federation. Gotta love the never ending, self perpetuating justifications for racial discrimination and collective punishment against those born the wrong race.

Elliott

The U.N. is not good at governing. And I have a feeling this is a deeper issue than just this local instance. As is the micro is the macro in writing, so I suspect the rest of the Coalition is also very hands–off. Tied in with the main story I suspect this is indicative with the rest of their operations until shown otherwise. Until then I'm 100% team Consortium.

EliasArt2Life

Despite the fact that Chloe and Kelvanis had an idea that what they were doing was wrong, I feel they don’t deserve even the majority of the blame. Kenzo was the one who was supposed to tell Chloe rules like “after you review their case, Kolshians are to return to their assigned quarters, immediately.” And “Kolshians are not allowed on the human level, no exceptions.” Ignorance of the law is no excuse, but that’s ONLY when you have access to the law. Kenzo impeded access to the station and job’s rules, so Chloe’s infringement is at least partially on him (I’d say mostly). Chloe still is on the hook for ignoring the implications of biometric scanners, and an obvious conflict of interest, but Kenzo failed his job, which was to get her up to speed so that INCIDENTS LIKE THIS COULD BE AVOIDED. If Chloe gets fired, Kenzo should too. As for the rejection of Kelvanis’ asylum request, I have to agree; he’s not applicable. As others have pointed out; he’s a refugee, not an asylum seeker. His case should have been handled by a refugee center. Now, why there doesn’t seem to be one is beyond me. My guess is that the asylum workers need to submit it to a UN group on Earth, but they don’t due to racism. Bureaucracy is the biggest headache the moment people stop communicating what NEEDS to get done. If I filled out the wrong form, I shouldn’t need to wait a month to ask what went wrong to be told about the other form; they should just mention it in the rejection, and provide me with said form.

EliasArt2Life

I’ve noticed that too, but honestly, that’s what has kept me invested in these stories. A lot of stories drag it out, thinking that the longer they make the tension last, the greater the release, but I usually end up getting overwhelmed and have to stop engaging with the story. It’s been nice to have a steady stream of fiction where I don’t have to worry if I’ll even be able to finish it.

Kevo

Love at first sight seems a little naive atleast to me

Guardian

Either a flashback or he goes into detail at some later point would be neat!

Monolith

Would like to see a chapter from Kenzo's POV. Seems like there's a lot more to him than just "Racist asshole". Sounds like he went through something similar to Chloe and paid the price for it.

TheDudeAbides

Dude got stabbed so they promoted him from just interviewing aliens to being the one who gets to make the decision about the refugee applications? Good going UN, give the guy with more reason to hate them more than anyone even more power.

Octopi inTheSky

As sad as it is, but Kelvanis case isn’t really a case for seeking asylum. He is under no threat as far as we know and just wants asylum to follow his passion and change the current view on kolshians. Which is all noble and important, but its no base for an asylum. Its more a case of discrimination, that he and all the other civilians get locked on their planets for what the shadow cast did. And in the long term, keeping them locked in and separated from the rest of the world, will just breed hate and extremism.

Apogee

Seemed like a shank since the scar is described as jagged seems like she made it after she got there

Ron1990

I need Romeo and Juliet with a happy end. 🥺 please? 🥺

Piittis

Has ANY Kolshian even been granted asylum? Because it sure doesn't seem like it would ever happen. More seems like this whole thing is just for show more than anything. I'd like to hear more details about this incident, because an emotional Kolshian suddenly being approached by a human (which they are still afraid of) could easily trigger a panicked response. Though with the guards seemingly having received the American police training (shoot first, then shoot more), I feel that the Kolshian got killed seconds later. Also how did she have a knife? Did they just not have any security checks before that?

Neu5Ac

In the words of Wallace, "that went as well as could be expected didn't it, hmm?" Anyway, I wonder if Kelvanis is going to face some real persecution now that others likely know that he attempted to escape the planet.

Byron Ritchie

Well at least Perry seems like a nice guy At least when compared to kenzo

Neu5Ac

Seeking asylum is part of the refugee system. The way it's supposed to work is that someone who is evading some kind of human (sapient) rights violation (genocide, forced displacement, cultural suppression/erasure, etc) can apply for asylum, where they will be rapidly granted the right to enter the asylum nation if their application is warranted. After some time, they can be granted official refugee status, which comes with additional protections and the right to eventually apply for citizenship in the asylum nation. While it doesn't make for a happy story, Kelvanis' case is very much a cut and dry denial, as having the job you want is not a fundamental right.

AlphaAllNight Gaming

Na, I’d say Kenzo was pretty on point this chapter, mans was spitting straight facts

Monolith

You assume she wasn't just shot on sight as soon as the station was put on alert. Judging from how trigger happy the security guards are.

S1nsational

Refugee status would probably work a lot better

Almatty

Im really enjoying this story. Even with the extreme pace. I do want to note a recurring theme with your stories. You set up some kind of tension, in this case "im hiding a relationship with an asylum seeker" but instead of letting the tension sit and boil it gets resolved as soon as possible. I'm not trying to say that style is bad, but wanted to provide food for thought when writing future drama focused chapters.

Teizu

i’m really not liking this un decision

un_pogaz

Damn, that's shitty. Of course it couldn't have been that easy. Kelvan's refusal is so unfair, but others are just pointing out that *is* sadly consistent with an asylum application. Frankly, I have no idea how this series will continue. I can understand Kenzo's dislike for the Kolshians after such an incident, but his attitude is still very problematic. Also, I wonder what this Kolshian farmer's motivation was. I think Kenzo is misinterpreting this gesture: it's not because the Kolshians are "assholes", but because people in a desperate situation can react violently to bad news, and that's outside their own normal behavior. The fact that its social workers are not properly trained and warn of such outbursts is a serious failing. (Oh, I've just imagined that Kelvan meets this farmer and she's terribly sorry for what she's done, but because of this she doesn't even have the right to contact Kenzo for apologize)

Corporal Chunk

"After yesterday was a perfect, blissful day, today was a nightmare" well well well, if it isn't the consequences of my own actions... And also kenzo is kinda right on this one

StormTheSquid

Sounds to me like Kenzo needs another knife in the gut, personally.

Mari

I wonder how many other case workers have been attacked and if any of them have died

Corporal Chunk

Very true, Kelvanis seems fine living on Aafa, no real danger of being captured and tortured by cartels or anything

Byne

"Kelvanis is under no active persecution or fear for his life, so there was no reason for asylum to be granted" as much of a dick as Kenzo is, this is what I was thinking the whole time. Asylum isnt really a 'I wanna do a fun job that isnt possible where I currently live' kind of thing.

pogman

fifth

Youre a swedekisser arent you

The chapter itself was sweet, and then it wasn't. Now I'm really worried about what's gonna happen D: Oh, and Perry, 'because if you are, you’re so fucked.”' I'm afraid Kelvan is already way ahead of you,

Corporal Chunk

Third, watching a movie rn lmao

Paperclip

"I used to be receptive like you. Then I took an arrow in the knee!"

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