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Chapter 111 - The Caller

🕑 Added 2023-05-24 14:24:01 +0000 UTC
Chapter 111 - The Caller

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TMarkos

I try to slide in those vocab words where I can, lol. The Safid include the Verse of Blood because it corresponds to the Speaker (Spark) and focuses mostly on things aligned with that sphere; its companion book is the Verse of Growth that focuses on the Caller. I hadn't defined the order too strictly but I had envisioned it as Division first, Flame, Secrets, Blood (the entropy books first) followed by Growth, Truth, Light and Union last (the Order books, making a second arc). I don't tend to strive for lurid or horrifying in most of my writing unless I'm writing scenes where people are being terrible to one another. In those cases it's worth spending the extra detail because all of it hits harder. This chapter in particular had to horrify Michael, so it was necessary to convey his perception of things; inevitably I'm going to have some dude on RR who posts a comment about how dumb and naive Mike is for intervening even so. Such is life. I am very excited to write Amira again, lol. She's fun, and she's getting some chapter art. There is some acknowledgment of how far Sofia has fallen at the beginning of the next chapter... The natural stopping point just happened to be before that scene.

Blorcyn

eigengrau — what a lovely word. Also, interesting chapter. The opening and the stillness and the immediately obvious way in which the epigraph ties into the Safid village, but more than that, how it tied into Michael living up to it at the Crux. Chefs kiss. It’s still somewhat fascinating that they’d have this verse of blood in their holy book, I suppose, too. The battle was suitably horrifying. And the description of the children’s prayers, the fifteen year old deaths. I don’t know why or how your story is able to make sweaty palmed and aware of my beating heart during these battles. I remember his lightning calling against sever. That chase through the barbed wire gave me palpitations and had me twitching with adrenaline. I can think of almost no other story that could do this. Maybe the First Law by Abercrombie with the Bloody Nine. Incredibly visceral war scenes, and horror, and fear, even with such a balanced and philosophical character as Michael. If you made a Faustian deal, hook me up with your guy. I’m so happy to see Shield again, though does make me worry for her safety. I am curious to get her take on Luc and the events since we last saw her. I am extremely unhappy with Sophia. I can’t reconcile the character we saw, even with her hatred of Michael, with the eye helping to target bomb the village and the war crimes she’s facilitating. Despicable.

TMarkos

Thank you! This one turned into a bit more than I had initially planned, but I'm really happy with how it came out.

Alexandria Clarke

Beautiful and amazing chapter as always!


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