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The Camera, Part 1

🕑 Added 2022-01-28 01:06:07 +0000 UTC

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Josh Stack

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Josh Stack

Personally I like that we get to see multiple perspectives. This will allow us to see the transformation from the point of view of the person it’s happening to, the person who’s causing it, and a neutral third party. Speaking of which you seem to be setting up Jared for some serious karma but I’m not sure how that will work. In his current state he wouldn’t make a very cute ABDL even if he was brainwashed. I suppose he could be the daddy for our two soon to be diaper girls but he deserves so much worse. Too bad there isn’t a machine that changes people physically instead of mentally, though I understand if you’re not into the idea of Jared turning into exactly the kind of woman he so obviously lusts after. Either way, I don’t want Jared or Natalie getting out of this with their free will intact. The moment they decided that they’re going to use this tech on people they chose their fate. Going back to the part about multiple viewpoint characters I had an idea: if you ever get writer’s block and can’t think of anything new, I wouldn’t mind seeing some old stories/chapters redone in this style. For example: Archway chapter 2 from Sonia’s perspective. Lastly I’m wondering how exactly this story will play out. One thing that Jared and Natalie overlooked that I think will be important: when you’re dealing with animals you don’t have to worry about them getting access to the mind control device. Perhaps brainwashed Molly will decide she wants playmates.


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