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The Armchair

🕑 Added 2022-06-28 20:27:05 +0000 UTC

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aaron clark

"I could just imagine her rolling her eyes to him" The "to" should probably be an "at". "I remember the first time I went dancing." With a similarly structured sentence only a few lines before this one, maybe some variety in wording could help. "I haven't been there in a while ... The last time I went was six years ago." Why give the last time she went a bit of ambiguity if you immediatly give the exact date? "Whipped into my" "my" to "me" All on all a lovely short story.


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