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Dialogue Update: Chapter 5 (Pages 171-174, 179, 183-186, 188, 190, & 193)
🕑 Added 2021-08-19 17:49:07 +0000 UTCASDFGHJLKJHKLAGHH
FINAL storyline/dialogue update for ya!
Recap: I've been reworking certain dialogue scenes/pages/parts of the story in preparation of the print version of BKI, Volume 1.
The next dialogue update/round of edits I worked on were from Chapter 5. WOO I'M FINALLY DONE WITH THESE 😭🙌
The changes I will be implementing here are as follows:
- General retouching/reworking of most dialogue & speech bubbles (wording, positioning, flow, etc.)
- Slight narrative edit on Page 184-185: okay so I know I've edited the dialogue on this page a couple different times, but I think this new text will fit much better. I kind of changed it to be a call back to chapters 1 & 3 where Norman moves shit around with his magic/powers. Idk it works but I'm still unsure if I LOVE it, ya know? I may just end up removing the text bubbles on panel 4 altogether.
Lmk what you think! Have a wonderful day/evening! 💕
-J
© James Schleisman August 2020 All Rights Reserved.
Comments
Jamie Schleisman
Unfortunately I can't give away that part about the time stop b/c spoilers, but as far as speaking terms go, think of Norman and his coven like siblings who bicker a lot. they're probably all still awkward/uncomfy as they still don't know how to feel about Cal and Normans part in his summoning. Norman on the other hand is busy off doing other things so he probably hasn't taken the time to think about what they feel about Cal/pocket space timeout 🤷🏻♂️
Julian
I have a question after page 193 we pick up in bed with Liam but everything got forzen what happened. Also is Norman on speaking term with anyone in his coven after they put him in pocket space timeout
TAC
Norman does look hot in this sweat pants. I'm glad to see to the 'just a horny little incubus' line stayed. That is one of my favorites.
Allan Meyer
Also: SWEATPANTS
