FapsCommunity
blackkeyincubus from patreon
blackkeyincubus patreon

Mind Ya Business (NSFW Short Story) 🔞

🕑 Added 2020-01-16 20:09:31 +0000 UTC
Mind Ya Business (NSFW Short Story) 🔞

Comments

Jamie Schleisman

Your in-depth analysis is much appreciated! Thank you so much for taking the time to share this with me. I really appreciate how thoughtful it was ❤️ I hope I didn't make Liam's perspective too sad/depressing though 😅

Jamie Schleisman

More coming right up! 😋 Thank you so much for your feedback

I love reading MM romance written by a gay man. It may be subtle but the style and perspective just appeals to me. I really appreciated the switch in style between Liam’s fantasy/dream sequence and when he snaps out of it back to the real world. For a first foray into this kind of writing- it was so good! More please!

Allan Meyer

Well done. So we know Liam is a paranormal investigator, not a writer, thus his slightly specific medical textbook porn narrative satisfies his need to get off. Which is to say a hot man’s hot fantasy is still enough to raise the temperature in the room - in a voyeur’s exhibitionist’s voyeur context. I love that detail by the way, that Fantasy Liam gets off on someone outside hearing his -their- sex. What is it about a hot man, albeit a deeply conflicted and possibly emotionally stunted hot man, that he knows he’s hot and we still do as well, flaws be damned. When the scene switches to reality thank you for making Liam have some reflection and deserved regret towards Norman. Fantasy Liam wants the world to witness their lovemaking but Real Liam can’t (won’t) hold Norman’s hand in public. Like another commenter said- horny and sad.


More Creators