Andy Abdl
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🕑 Added 2024-04-07 22:25:24 +0000 UTC After so many time promising that one day I would do a comic xD here it is. English/Spanish https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1Excd7nY38wX4uEwDlsTMQJ0uIhzs0Tad?usp=sharing Some of you have seen some panels I shared some time ago in discord, as I said back then, the only way that I could do a comic was to change my style to something that doesn't require as much time as I need for the normal style I have, normally to do a 1 piece requires 20-26 hours so for a comic it would be impossible, but I tried to find a more cartoonish and stylized to draw :p. I need to ask for 2 favors as I said yesterday, the first is easy hehe, is the feedback, I need to hear what you think about every aspect of the comic, from the style, the expressions, or panels. The characters, their dialogues, the amount of them, their personalities, the story and the development itself, and of course the English xD I'm a Spanish native speaker so my English is not good hehe. you can read the next paragraphs after you have finished the first chapter of the comic :D . . . . Every kind of feedback is welcome, don't worry about being hard :D i appreciate more the bad critics so i can improve, and in this case, i know i made so many mistakes haha, it is the first comic/story I have done, in the first place i didn't make a script or even write anything before drawing it, ( i have 0 ideas how to do a comic haha or a story) i was drawings panels just having in mind the general idea of the story and the scenarios, with time i realized that because of that the 90% of the mistakes that i did are because of that. And here is the second favor. because of Patreon shutting down and the delay of the approval here in Suscriberstar, it just fuck up my schedule about everything xD, and I couldn't sketch the second chapter(I have all the story in my mind about the comic) but I think it would be better that I ll sketch all the second chapter before start to rendering so I can make changes before, panels or the number of dialogues, etc, With that, I can simplify and polish everything trying to avoid the mistakes i made, like trying to do so many dialogues and scenes/themes in a few pages, considering that it will have a similar amount of pages or at least more, so i can tell a better and organic panels/story, etc. So, in that case, i'll need at least 1 month to do at least 70-80% of the second chapter in Sketch, so for this month i won't be able to start the second chapter (publish it) Well all of this if you want, or i can start this month, it all depends if what everyone wants or at least the majority ;p the same is for the 2nd comic, i was first thinking on doing a poll about 3 stories but in that case, I will need this month to sketch everything as well, or just start with one of those (powerpuff girls) I ll post the front page tomorrow. so what do you think about all of this :D let me know here or MD or Discord, thanks again! sry about all the text xD https://discord.gg/QyBV8wgF Here it is the discord server btw!
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Andy Abdl
hmm I have always thought about offering things like that, but is extremely expensive here to send to other countries, maybe i should ask someone in the abdl comunity how it works :p maybe working with someone who can send it even if I m not earning something there would be no problem xD
Manager
I am happy to help ^^ And yes, I mean a physical edition. Maybe I'm old school, but I love books.
Andy Abdl
Thank you so much for the feedback :3 everything is noted! that helps a lot haha i m glad that you like it. what do you mean by book? a physical edition?
Manager
4/4 But the story captivated me, how Aurora and Dasha met and the background to your characters <3 I think surveys are good because they make you feel included as a supporter. Also the note about it: it takes a month is very important, because I know most comics in such a way that the finished pages are published and the story grows bit by bit (e.g. Sketch-Man does it that way). That also has that The advantage is that you don't feel like you have to wait that long and you have a certain amount of tension (which is sometimes really stupid when you have to wait a week for the next episode of a very good series XD) But how you do it is up to you! And another question: do you think that you would like to publish the comics as a book at some point?
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3/4 I think it's very successful that the characters have different speech bubble colors, it improves the flow of reading. On page 11 I got confused at the top left with the conversation on Facebook about who was speaking. I only found out later (on page 12) that the square boxes were where the diary was written, because there was a diary in between. Maybe diary-like pages would be beneficial there. Language: I'm a German native speaker and therefore can't say much about English XD I just noticed that you didn't do a ' before I'm and you'll (page 8 on the right, the third picture from the top). Otherwise they happened. Likewise, on some pages there is a ? before the question, which doesn't even occur in English. So on page 5 at the bottom in the middle, on page 7 at the bottom left, page 8 second picture from the top left, page 9 at the top left, page 26 at the top right twice, page 33 second picture from the bottom, The same with that! I only noticed “Hi!” in the retsaurant on page 5.
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2/4 Writing style: But I noticed that letters to half words are often outside the thought/speech bubbles, like the R from Over or the W from What on page 3. An idea would be to change the font size. On page 4 in the box above, the I is completely obscured by the dark frame and is very difficult to see. But what I noticed on page 3 is that certain parts of the letters are swallowed up by the thought bubble. For example, in "Let me put you over" the L and R are somewhat swallowed up. I think changing the font size (as I did with the last thought bubble on page 3) is easiest. Particularly strong with the first letter "I" on page 4. On page 30, two letters even jump out completely in “Don’t worry about it, little …”
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Only 1000 letters are allowed, so I'll split my answer into: 1/4 Everything was fantastic. I couldn't stop reading. Even though I had to get out early in the morning, the background story of how the two of them met really captivated me. But since you wanted to hear suggestions for improvement, I'm focusing on that. Type stem: I love this kind of simplicity (even if everything takes time) and yet that you can see so many details. The emojis in the comic are also really cute and, due to her overreaction, underline the narrator's feelings so that you can empathize with her even better.
