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Chapter CXLI Cursed Dwarves, and...

🕑 Added 2022-01-08 15:51:16 +0000 UTC

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Jonathan A Countyman

It's fine. I do have plans to continue both. Honestly the only reason I stopped is that I have been having a hard time lately finding the time. And yeah I know the story needs a major rewrite.

Indream

Thanks for the chapter. Well, i guess trio of researches can be useful with mecha restoration for example and some other stuff. Also free spirited gods? Guess everyone wanna go on journey sometimes. And i have a feeling that Tazi, after meeting Misaki, may also move to Bordertown. P.S. Are there any plans on continuing First Lord and Succubus? And rereading novel once again, i got a feeling that Dungeon need some good revising. It's as fun as before, don't get me wrong, but novel will benefit much from revising. Some characters can be turned into more of backgroundish type (like Melissa trio, coz honestly not much going with them and not much they have. They only gain some development much latter and it's not that big as far as i remember. While they have a lot of time "screen" for no good reason). Some can be either removed or get more implementation, like: Daniel the Dungeon Priestess (she appears 3 time, one time with whole chapter. Have some nice introduction, only to just dissapear. And whole priests of dungeon could be interested). Eris (Swarm Queen in Misaki Dungeon) appeared as fast as dissapeared basicaly. And she even became Misaki mate. What's the point? Lily, if you don't have some good plans for her, can be introduced much latter. She kinda faded after initial appearence and don't see much, if any, time. And her parents feel entirely unneeded, unless you have some plans for them. Rather maybe play her like Misaki from Succubus? Thankfully, Erosi have female form. So she can be her daughter and be dropped around now? So she can join Phyllis&Misaki party (and family ^_^). Some more dungeon building&defence could be nice, coz as of now, this element feels entirely forgotten (it faded kinda early to begin with), with some more well written rules about it. P.P.S. Sorry for a rant, but honestly, while on first read of novel, you don't notice this things, on second and so on, you start to notice all this. Once again, sorry for ranting.

Jonathan A Countyman

It does, doesn't it...

Basically God

Seems like Misaki is going to get a big ol' buff this arc so those dragons better be scared~!


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