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Redone page, a new page, some added dialogue, and a progress update
🕑 Added 2022-07-09 14:48:18 +0000 UTCPages 10 and 11 are super important to the story of Toph Heavy. In Part 2 Poppy Beifong (Toph's Mother) was the only one who recognized what happened under the table. That was meant to imply that Poppy had a libido and Toph had inherited it. It was meant to be a jumping-off point for pages 10 and 11 in Part 3 and those pages would set Toph on her journey.
I was looking at Page 10 last week, and I absolutely hated it, but unlike some other pages, I couldn't get rid of it. It's too important. The leg anatomy was bad, Toph had Hobbit feet, the proportions were wrong, etc. So I had to redraw it. It's not perfect, but it's better.
You can see the original here https://www.patreon.com/posts/part-3-pages-5-8-44852544 (lol, page 10 used to be page 8)
However, when I finished redrawing Page 10, I realized that I needed a new page after it.
As I said, Pages 10 and 11 are super important to the story. The problem was that Page 10's composition was too crowded for all of the information that I wanted to communicate. I attempted to edit down the script but the message suffered when I did. So I redid the dialogue on Page 10 and added a page after.
This allowed me to put in extra dialogue on the page that followed. Now, I think stuff makes more sense, and we get a small scene of Toph's mom as a bonus.
In this post you have the two redone pages without dialogue, and then all three pages with dialogue.
That was the last thing I needed to change. It took a little longer than I would have preferred, but now it's full steam ahead. No more redos, no more new pages. Currently, I am on page 73 of the inks and Page 10 of the flats. The inks will be finished this month and will be made available for the WIP tier. After that, I will be flatting at the rate of 2 to 3 pages a day.
I am currently working monday - friday, and I am inking 2 pages and flatting 1 a day. This is about 6 hours of work. Once flatting is done, I do not know how long it will take to render.
But its snow balling now, and that's why I haven't posted as much.
Comments
Daniel Onuoha
This is really good. The story flows better this way.
NKL
Definitely, a change for the better. Great take on the young Poppy.
