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Part 3 - Page 5 - Sketch - Redone
🕑 Added 2022-02-01 00:43:58 +0000 UTC"Earthbending let's me sense everything around me. That's a double-edged sword. Yeah, being able to sense ants that no one else can see is pretty neat, but sometimes you see things you'd rather not."
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"that's so disgusting. I'm never having kids."
Alright, so, gotta talk about this redo. In page 4, a local waterbender tells Toph she can't get pregnant and her reaction is "Fantastic!" Page 5 is supposed to explain why. When I posted the inked version of Page 5 I said that it was my least favorite page. Hopefully you can see why.
The original page was too complex. As a reader, I value clarity. I value when I can look at a page and an idea is communicated clearly. I'm not absolutely perfect at that kind of thing, but page 5 was way below my standard for clarity.
Judge for yourself. Is the idea that Toph sensed a birth and it grossed her out communicated? Because that's what the idea was for page 5 from the beginning.
Speaking of clarity, the pregnant lady that Toph senses will be grey scale/silhouetted like seismic sense usually is, so her look could be adjusted later.
All in all, I am MUCH happier with this page. Let me know what you think.
Tomorrow I am going to add one more new page, and then after that make some more page adjustments. See you then.
Comments
Daniel Onuoha
Yeah I think this new page better illustrates Toph's view on pregnancy and childbirth.
