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STnS: Chapter 104

🕑 Added 2022-08-19 15:03:01 +0000 UTC

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I understand what you are saying, but his name carries dangers. The person who attacked the Wu Clan can find anyone associated with the name, so he has to use an alias. I don't intend to have people call his name very often, so I hope it won't be too much of a bother, but he can't go by Wu Jian. Would it help if I just called him Jian Wu from now on?

Michael Jackson

If it was me i would just keep his name as it was this doing it one way then another is confusing the story, knock it off call him dave if you have to but stop going down this rabbit hole please

I've actually corrected most of these issues, but the bases one slipped by me. Thank you.

Edit - “B-Boss! Mao Yuhan…! Mao Yuhan was…!” “What about Mao Zemin?” asked Mao Yuhan, frowning as an unpleasant feeling settled in his gut. - Should this be Mao Zemin from the guy calling out? Edit - Wu Jian began going over their plan now that everyone was on the same page. The first thing they needed to do was secure several locations they could use as a base. - Should it be 'bases'? I.E. "...secure several locations they could use as bases." Also, reading through, when you state who's talking, it's Wu Jian but when people address him, it's Jian Wu; I didn't see any mix ups this time round? That being said, Tanner I think caught some. :)

Thanks.

Yeah. TBH I'm not at my best today, and my webpage keeps crashing, so I'm constantly having to refresh it.

Benjamin Collins

There's a lot of little errors in this chapter like the guy coming into the throne room keeps saying the wrong name, you wrote two instead of to things like that

Can’t wait for the battle to begin!!

Ugh... for some reason, I keep forgetting this. Thank you for reminding me.

Tanner Lovelace

Is everyone calling Jian by his name in the correct order now? I thought he was still going by Jian Wu?


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