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Severing Time: Chapter 30

🕑 Added 2022-03-14 14:56:09 +0000 UTC

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Bart Ursulla Van de Velde aka High Four

“Last night, Mei and I snuck out and overheard his (my, since it's from Wu Jian's point of view) father talking about what happened during our time in Zahn City…” Great chapter again.

Thanks for noticing this. I think you're right, so I'll make the correction.

Benjamin Collins

After he hears what his dad says and he gets back to his room you wrote, he took off his cloak, shoes, and sat on the bed. I don't think it's wrong but it sounds funny in my head. He took off his cloak and shoes, then sat on the bed, seems like a better structure to me and flows more easily


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