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Severing Time: Chapter 29

🕑 Added 2022-03-10 15:27:30 +0000 UTC

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Bart Ursulla Van de Velde aka High Four

"Her hair, a lustrous cascade of soft brown, glowed under the sun's touch, intricately woven into a complicated braid that." I think that this sentence isn't complete or the "that" at the end is too much. Great chapter again.

Ah. It was supposed to be "That doesn't seem 'fair'"

Benjamin Collins

Also when Jian tells shen about the engagement shen says "Now that doesn't seem now, does it" so that's weird

Tanner Lovelace

Yeah, looks like everything after “So that’s what a cultivator’s bloodlust feels like…” says Shen when it should say Han. It really confused me the first time I read it because I thought Ming Shen was the same level as Wu Jian but based on the text it was saying Shen was near Jian’s father’s level.

Thank you for the correction. I'll go in and fix that.

Really?! Shoot. Thanks for pointing that out.

Yes I think 4 name entries are mixed up

Daniel Glasson

I think you mixed up Ming Shen and Ming Han in that second section


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