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WIEDERGEBURT Act VII: Chapter 27

🕑 Added 2021-10-07 15:01:05 +0000 UTC

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Bart Ursulla Van de Velde aka High Four

"this princess would be more than happy yo oblige you.” i forgot where exactly this was but i believe its "happy to oblige you ", “Do make make this princess laugh. " during the fight between Tora and Lin, i think it should be "do not make this princess laugh" great chapter again, i love to see Fay (my favorite of Eryk's wives) to grow stronger and with more confidence.

Thanks for finding that. I'll go through the episodes and see if I can find that section to fix it.

Ashly E Wood

I can't find it anymore, but somewhere if a fight scene you wrote "give/gave me a run for my running," should have been a run for my money?

Thanks for catching those. I appreciate it.

Daniel Glasson

Caught a couple mistakes. You have "Nice bad!" When Tora is sparring with Eryk and "Consider you have a friend who loves on the moon" during Fray's explanation to Fay


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