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WIEDERGEBURT Act VI: Chapter 27

🕑 Added 2021-04-19 15:10:33 +0000 UTC

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Yeah. I definitely messed up here. As you can tell, these chapters are very raw and there are a lot of mistakes. I need to go back and make sure all my facts are consistent. Thanks for pointing this out to me. I'll look through this manuscript and make sure my story has Kari either consistently using time or dimension based on what's in the rest of my story.

Tanner Lovelace

Does this mean that more than 4 years have passed for Fay and Lin?

Tanner Lovelace

"Kari was trying to learn about the Concept of Dimension" -- But later on you have her using the concept of time. I assume that was a change that needs to be reflected here?

Thank you. I'm happy you hold this story in such high regard. I'll do my best to keep improving and working hard so you enjoy my writing even more. ^_^

Looting Pillager

To be honest most of my quibbles are not big and are so easy to resolve it is probably just a creation in my own mind. Your writing is fantastic, and I think this series in particular is the best of its type I have ever read, and I tell people that a lot. Not that a ton of people listen to me but this is still true.

No worries. Thanks for pointing out your concerns. Some of these are things I can definitely look into improving upon. My final manuscript should be much better than the rough draft here on Patreon.

Looting Pillager

Sorry I don't mean to be overly negative, it is a problem I have. Love your stories.

I can't make any promises. The most I can promise is he'll have kids near the end, but a lot of stuff is about to go down, so having kids might not be the best idea.

Feel free to mention what problems you have.

Looting Pillager

I have a few problems with this chapter. 1. Kari did Not spend 10 years with Eryk seeing him every day. She went into seclusion for years. 2. If they were training to get a higher level concept why are they at a front line fortress? Do the Drakvar consider someone with no higher level concept a combatant or a child? 3. Are the leaders and their guests of two realms really luggage porters now? Isn't there people more suited to the task around. This kind of sounds like if the president of France and prime minister of Japan met on the tarmac and began unloading the plane. 4. Why are there soooooo many Rapists in these upper realms? Do women not know higher level concepts or something? Everywhere we go we are stumbling over rapists. People can suck in other ways.

Paigeon

Around 3 months in asgard and nice hat time he has spend und in the forest. But, it is not zur first time he's timetravelling

The time Eryk spends in his realm is far less than the others. I'll have to go back and check, but I don't believe it was more than a year.

Theo

Please, please, let Eryc have more Children with his other wives. I am getting desperate here.

Paigeon

OK, 4 years for Kari and Siv. But, how much time for eryk? 3 months? 4?

Thanks for the catch. I'll be sure to correct that when I begin editing this Act. I'm glad you are enjoying this. The story should pick up the pace soon.

Tim Nielsen

We continued to Converse for several others.... Should it be hours and not others? I like this chapter the story is starting to become interesting and more on the edge of your seat.


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