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WIEDERGEBURT Act IV: Chapter 17

🕑 Added 2020-07-13 15:34:34 +0000 UTC

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Yellow line?

“Thirty lamia were kidnapped,” Queen Medusa answered. “Five of them were men. Twenty-five were women. I can give you a list of their names and a physical description of them, so you’ll know who to look for.” Does anyone else see the yellow line between in the er of Answered?

Kconraw

"He ran my fingers through her hair." Should be " I ran my fingers

Thank you for the suggestion. I'll probably add more to my manuscript when I begin editing this volume. :-)

I think it might be a good idea to elaborate a bit more about what Muhammad was probably planning to do by kidnapping all of those lamias. An example would be like framing Eryk's group for their disappearance, which he would have done had Eryk's wives not trounced the Red Scorpions so quickly and captured the leader. Then, you could make it seem as if Muhammad and the Malik Family have a long history.

That is definitely a typo. XD

Max Pellant

“No, there are a few who might do something like 66this for the right price,” is this a typo?


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