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Author's Note

🕑 Added 2025-12-11 06:12:58 +0000 UTC

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Future

Noted. Hope recent chapter addresses this

Josh kindred

I like the story direction but wanted to ask if eri is gonna show having issues with her quirk like in Canon. It was always a concern for her and seems forgotten in alot of fanfictions

Amir

one of my suggestions is to stretch time zone of canon, because almost everything in canon happened in one year. And its quite unreal. It would be much better to strerch along all 3 years. And it will give a bit more time for growth

Future

Thanks. I appreciate it. I have also noted your suggestions and concerns. For the whole overhaul part .. well, I'll be honest and say I didn't really think it throughly as I was doing the rewrite and didn't really have much room for stretching. I'll note everything else

Future

Oh yeah, I haven't fully explained those yet. Well you already have to hat one can do.

Pika XD

I just wonder what the Mangekyo abilities are gonna be.

Chris

I think it's pretty good.

Wizzy

I'll clarify, I don't think his Body Manipulation is on the same level as Panacea's Biokinesis, though it would be awesome to see it be trained to that level along with his Chakra abilities

Wizzy

Doing good! I think the whole "Control over your body" aspect could be greatly expanded upon. I was thinking about it during the fight with Todoroki and it would be useless now but could he have gained the ability to stick to walls by creating the hooks that Tobey Maguire's Spider-Man had? That ability was pretty much just tiny hairs on his hands that allowed him to hook into walls and retracted when he didn't want to stick. Or is his ability not to that power yet and is mainly just used to shift his organs? When I think of Body Manipulation, I think of Panacea from Worm who's ability in body manipulation is absolutely busted but she can't use it on herself. I think it should greatly be explored going forth...

Nick Pearson

If he has total control of his body, does that mean he can eat vitamins and minerals to increase the strength and durability of his body, like Chad from Super Powereds? If so, is his quirk the same as Chad's power?

Joe

I think he should be preparing the bullshit speech for nezu when he needs to explain how his 'control' awakened and gave him chackra, pin wheel eyes and a chackra mech which looks like a demonic warrior, i also believe he should further observe the synergy between chackra and his quirk, perhaps he could look into space/time/dimensional jutsu which would be easier because of his quirk, could let him have storage seals and could be a way to get nature chackra, letting a smalldimensional tear to naruto's dimension or atleast a dimension with chackra to flood the world with it for senjutsu and easy use genjutsu 😃, ignore the possibility of ninja superheros coming about eventually down the line, because quirks totally wouldn't evolve to eventually take advantage of chackra

ShiroHige92

I think you have been doing a good job. In terms of quirk and powers, your explanations so far make sense. I do question how you will explain his ninja techniques like shadow clone and element release when questioned? I think it would fit the storyline better if he only sticks with the academy three, shadow clones, body flicker and rasengan in terms of naruto techniques. His use of sharingan could be as a tool for analysis and prediction instead of copying. This is just a suggestion and I am curious on how you will move the story forward

doomdude

You doing good 👍

Turles

Other than his quirk and chakra inconsistencies (as mentioned in my reply to your reply), I don’t really think there’s much else. He’s not in class 1-A yet so there’s not much to critique regarding character interactions quite yet since they haven’t happened in a major capacity lol. Also, I’m having a great night! Hope you have a good rest of your day! 👍😙